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Random Poem:

For The First Time
kenosborne

For The First Time (1993)
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Seeing my father for the first time
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in that old caravan in Cottenham
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wrapped up against the cold,
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feeling his nervousness in the air,
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and the woman who called him father
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making tea and being kind;
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seeing the home that his wife made
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glad that she’d died, glad he was alone.
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Seeing the bathroom and the double bed
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and saying “How nice, how nice,”
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sipping my tea by the fireside
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examining his flickering face
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crushing anger in a clenched fist,
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tears in the aching sockets of my eyes,
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glad that he was old and ill,
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questions, questions burning in my mind.
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His passion of forty years past dead
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in the oily air, bitterness gone to dust,
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selected memories shut behind a door
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whose key was lost - to me so sorely lost.
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He’d turned away from us, wiped us out,
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never came back to say “I am your Dad.”
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We never knew his face, his touch, his voice,
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no hand to hold - no goodnight kiss.
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When asked “What does your father do?”
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I used to stare in open mouthed surprise:
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but then I didn’t understand
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what other kids had fathers for.
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There were only three of us, and Mum,
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isolated by her sad disgrace
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her family beyond our reach ‘up North’,
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his, all around, behind a silent wall.
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“Why?” I asked, “Why?” He closed his yellow eyes,
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“I knew how you were” he said, “all your lives.
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My brother kept an eye. Sometimes I came myself
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and from a distance watched you play.”
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“Why?” I asked. “In later years ...?”
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He coughed awhile. “I knew, I knew” he said.
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Quick to the rescue his step-daughter came
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pouring tea and photographs on the pain
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Easy again he slipped into the past
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showing his favourite picture .. of himself.
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“They called me ‘Bull’ at the steel works” he said,
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puffing his chest and straightening in the chair;
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and I knew then, after forty years of pain
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his love was for himself, the muscle and the blood
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pumping in his groin, women a prize,
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children an outflow to be forgot.
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In sepia brown the picture came
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across the tea cups and the empty plates,
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“Mum and Dad” he said. My grandparents!
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I didn’t know, I never thought that far!
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I looked at her face, soft and motherly,
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biting my lip, biting back the tears:
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there were uncles and cousins too
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a whole generation that we never met.
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He talked about his father then
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oblivious of me, of who I was,
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the happy days they’d had among
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boats and beaches, fishing and the sea;
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and I realized, among those old fishermen
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smoking their clay pipes on the promenade
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that I passed a thousand times as a boy,
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was my grandfather .. who never said.
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Somehow we rose to go.
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Shook hands, waved from the car window
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and drove the twenty miles back home,
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my wife and I, back in our own lives.
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Next time I took my son:
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he at least met his grandfather - once.
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I met my father twice. It was enough
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until I watched his coffin to the flame.
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