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Random Poem:

Oh, What A Guy
WithLestat

If being soulful means you’re full of soul
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Well, I sure am full of something you gave me
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But that’s for another day.
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You pricked me with your sharp claws,
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Like needles entering my flesh
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And depositing your goo
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And it traveled through all of me,
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Out of my mouth
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And back to you.
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You had me hooked,
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Control never looked
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Quite so good or seemed
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So fly. Just a sentence from you
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And I’ve sold hours of my life.
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The words you feed me are like little magic pills
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A druggie, I become, jonesing to get
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My fill. You leave me with the sunrise as
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A new day begins. I’m left alone
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And exhausted, with your scent
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On my skin.
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I’m anxious and holding on to the
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Distraction you give me, like a penance
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At the foot of your barstool altar,
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Crying “save me from my problems
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Oh father!”
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Goodbye to you as I drink that last drop,
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For if I stay with you ill be ten years older
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With nothing but a more resentful heart.
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I know I’ll miss you from time to time
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And I’ll think of you if you were still mine
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But then I’ll remember you never really were
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And I will then wake up and become more wise.
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I will be stronger and avoid your strategic charades.
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I will fold my hand in your stupid mind games.
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I’m finished! I’m through! I know I’ve said this before
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And you’re probably laughing if you’re keeping score,
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Tallying up my mistakes and how many times I fell off the wagon
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Giving in to your charms. Losing myself to the false
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High you give me. Oh, what a guy.
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You’re an entertainer, life of the party
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And when you’re not around,
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Everything’s more boring
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But you’re like a good Saturday night
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And a terrible Sunday Morning.
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You say I’m amazing, incredible, beautiful
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And more but you’re not ready yet to
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Be more than friends.
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What’s with guys these days? Is this
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Some kind of trend?
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I’m sick of your shenanigans.
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You’re an escape for me when I get stressed,
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a one-way ticket to irresponsibility
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Land via the Express. You’re a temporary upper
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Just before a downer, at best.
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You don’t really give a shit about me,
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That’s evident. Call me up only
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When it’s convenient. We drive around
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This place, I let you put your hands on me
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In a drunken daze.
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You kiss me and hold me,
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And it is in those little moments
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I just don’t understand how you
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Want to stay only friends.
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I know we have a connection and that is what
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makes this so difficult. But I’m not growing and
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Something needs to change and you have
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Made it clear we don’t see things the same.
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You’d be fine if everything just remained.
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But frankly, I’m not like other girls.
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And this situation is driving me
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insane.
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I could go on because despite all the shit
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You are one of the most memorable souls
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I have ever met and you came to me when I needed you
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But I do believe your duties are through.
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You listen, but you don’t really hear,
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Must be those earplugs made out of fear.
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I know deep inside there is a loving man
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Who knows I am pretty damn grand.
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This fucking blows but
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I need to woman-up and own
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The gates to my heart.
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Be more strict with who is allowed
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To enter and who gets a part.
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So I will go my own way and I wish
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You only the best.
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And while this
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Does suck, I’ll let you go. I hope you
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Figure your shit out too, because
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You really do deserve to let
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Someone in who loves you.
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