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Dear Sweetheart

Shuberth

Dear sweetheart Emily	1
How are you ? And do you remember me ?	2
I hope everything’s fine your way, I cannot stop thinking of you as I write this now	3
Oh! god I miss you somehow.	4

You like disappeared without saying goodbye, don’t you know I love you so much ?	5
Don’t you remember you said “I love you & I’ll always stay in touch” ?	6
I waited and waited for your email so that I would get a chance to reply	7
But days and months passed by without any sign & tears flown through my eyes it made me cry.	8

I exactly don’t know if you used to miss me then what made you remain clam ?	9
Have I ever treated you bad or your trouble I have become ?	10
I wanted to hear from you I waited for that mail to come and forgive me ‘cause for a while I was dumb	11
But after you left and after all this time I felt lonesome.	12

I wish I could go back in time when you and I were connected	13
Those memories left behind are trapped in my head and they will never fade.	14
I was on my way to write a poem on you but I couldn’t complete without feeling your presence	15
My mind could not go poetic with your absence.	16

Emily from the day you met me till this day I kept you in my prayers	17
Yes I wish everything good for you and nothing less	18
It’s been over a year now I wonder if this came to an end	19
As I think of you hoping you will prove me wrong and be my pen friend.	20

I’m going crazy without you, I’m addicted!	21
I cannot forget you and never will. Every day, every hour your name resounds in my head.	22
I miss your sweet words that lightened up day	23
Emily I really miss you & I love you even if you don’t feel about me the same way.	24

I’m not seducing you to continue with me	25
Let it be only your wish so throw it on my face and I will agree	26
Of course it’s your life you’re young and free	27
No one can force you and change the way you want it to be	28
And yes I would never like to see you unhappy.	29

You know my email address its shuberth@rediffmail.com	30
So feel free to throw it on my face let it explode like an atom bomb	31
Tell me if I ever hurt your feelings and I don’t know about or if I’m wrong	32
I’ll be waiting for your reply no matter if it’s very short or long.	33

Remember! Writing this I mean no offence and no harm	34
So dear don’t get me wrong, in my heart there is nothing but love for you & you’re always welcome!	35
No matter this world think I’m crazy and may they laugh	36
But Emily it’s you I’ll always love.	37

I’ll keep you locked in my brain	38
Even if we may won’t unite again	39
Emily you’re beautiful you’re the thought that occupies my mind	40
To know who you are and what you’ve been to me I don’t have to go rewind	41
Deep inside me you will always be the sweetest girl and my as my friend	42
Now, today, tomorrow and till the end.	43

-Shuberth	44

10/06/08

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