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Head in Your Hands
zebrastripes

Did home let you breathe
 1
beside a man you hardly knew
 2
while he screams at ex-wives
 3
over confused cell phones
 4
under unkempt moustaches
 5
in brand-new pick-ups?
 6
Face in a book
 7
Mouth in a coke
 8
and on a smoke
 9
 
 
Has the bell bit the leash
 10
that girds your neck
 11
sitting half on a chair
 12
trying to give an ear
 13
to a girl you'll never know
 14
in a world you'll never see?
 15
Lips to a pen
 16
Nails to the floor
 17
Eyes to the long hand
 18
 
 
Did the hook not catch
 19
a school of familiar eyes
 20
you thought were plugged in
 21
linked and at ease
 22
but instead flushed the faces
 23
of any fishmonger that cared?
 24
Words don't help
 25
Glances hopeful - lost
 26
Body language interpreted
 27
 
 
Was it guitar string tight
 28
when you mentioned the night
 29
that the wind carried songs
 30
that the birds could not mimmick
 31
hearing the notes through your blood
 32
like a Siren's whisper?
 33
Face in a pillow
 34
Pupils on the ceiling
 35
Heart in your hand
 36

4 Sep 04

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This has a really nice flow to it.
 — unknown

Nice flow, nice rhythm. It gets more interesting as it goes on. Very nice. Is that a typo in l1? did you mean breathe?
 — elysium

good tflow, nice rhyming, over all very nice, i liked it. :)
 — stainedsteel

Thanks guys, I really appreciate the compliments..
 — zebrastripes

Did anyone catch what this one was about?  Any critique would be great.
 — zebrastripes

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