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I Thought It Was Alcohol, But It Tasted Different
dmartin

Seagram, Absolute, A fifth of Jack,
 1
Captain and coke, and I took it back...
 2
 
 
Beautiful you were, smiling always
 3
and the flash didn't work
 4
but I got the picture, though fuzzy alright.
 5
Every laugh felt more at home,
 6
this was just October, and rightly we fell.
 7
Though you're my best friend's friend
 8
we let it ride, so happy
 9
This college intoxication couldn't erase the night.
 10
 
 
And when I thought of someone else
 11
standing next to you, I took it back.
 12

10 Oct 04

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This is actually quite well written, short and direct and its catchy at the beginning, L8-10, aren't the best, consider a revision there, otherwise I like it.
 — unknown

yes it isn't bad at all.
however everytime I read it
i think Jack Captain?
and as i couldn't think of anything else to say,
i thought it was probably better to say nothing at all.
i've suddenly realised however, that it tastes different.
now i'm happy and content in my found meaning.

kaleidazcope
 — unknown

That Captain Jack thing i got, it bothered me once i noticed it, thanks...
 — dmartin

This is great.  Very well done. Quite tight.
/m
 — unknown

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