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without a president looking president
insideouteye

putting on purpled thought.
 1
 
 
from noone faced down on a singing nickel.
 2
ventrilaquist pennies.
 3
and george washington with his own coin for brain as pet.
 4
 
 
              .in a leak thru a blindfold portrait.
 5
-a city shrunk from mc escher.next to its box of sky
 6
              
 7
)exit light . birthproof,
 8
 
 
a personified city with someone elses neck, carrying his eyesight in frames.
 9
, taking the doorknob)
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(he. in a human frame. a coldwater hat. and hand.
 11
 
 
-weather machines.(the necessary angel.... ,locked)
 12
 
 
 
 
            .my brain & eggs. since electricity
 13
 
 
-as an arm out from a tooth.
 14
 
 
in the eggless....... i dream of my poems thinking.
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with the soft typewriter of the womb.
 16
 
 
lenses extend.
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shakespeare or asprin.
 18
a day for doubting landing planes.
 19
 
 
, thoughts old worn out vagina.
 20
)i consider all ants to be sewing machines.  
 21
 
 
solid paper. and eyes like new tools. chisel a sharp sky by hairs of einstein.
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, or rain is to color : without boats
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       .the extinction of spine and fragile water.
 24
 
 
now: feeling memory shrink
 25
 
 
since i was a child.
 26
, using a whole eye.
 27
and telescopes full of GOD.
 28
 
 
-being the hippopotamous of my mind.
 29
 
 
but still unburryable birthday.
 30
 
 
so.....
 31
.death and entrances.
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as so much dry bread. to be bitten through.
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                                              ..remembering.
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                                         , in an empty museum.
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, paintings record.  .a city park howl.
 36
 
 
O,
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.umbrellad god--
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, by the hand of the statue.
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                       --at 700 mph
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about the glory between teeth.
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, from inside a dirty glass mind. perspective.
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                    in the lowercase i
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                                                 ,are birds spies. ?
 44
 
 
 
 
       a light out)
 45

.the presidents eye is dead

a sharp sky by hairs of einstein--
                                --an antennae for my toy eye

29 Oct 04

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proofreaders eye welcome here. ! ! !!
 — insideouteye

about punctuation...........FUCK THE FASHION SHOW!
 — insideouteye

or according to your lights. ?
 — insideouteye

proofreaders eye no longer welcome here .
 — insideouteye

h
 — unknown

yes
 — insideouteye

This gives me electric eyes.
 — insideouteye

h, its vegetable swallow.
 — insideouteye

yes we are too thin
 — unknown

an automatic throat maybe
 — insideouteye

my sister says hey.
 — unknown

555-8767
 — insideouteye

talk about eclectic.
 — psychedelico

im clapping.
 — baldeinstein

i have installed this into my frankenstein
 — baldeinstein

wwIII
 — unknown

ARE BIRDS SPIES.?
 — insideouteye

when swallows don't swallow
 — unknown

some interesting stuff here.

spelling stuff.

2 no one
3 ventriloquist
9 else's
28 hippopotamus
37 umbrealla'd

2 comma after no one
end with a semi-colon

5 i'm a fan of full language through versus thru.
6 nod to escher.
like 11

19 & 20 shrug me
27 saving your capitals for god eh?
sometimes i dream of words where god is the only word in small caps.

36 to 39 are just great
baldeinstein and you must be running backwards;
facing different directions.

good start
good end
so so middle.

worth the read just for 36 to 39
 — kaleidazcope

lmnop
 — unknown

WITHOUT  A  PRESIDENT &nb sp;LOOKING  PRESIDENT
 — insideouteye

since..
 — unknown

since
 — unknown

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 — unknown

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