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(LU) Bruce Lee

Bruce Lee
no thespian he
but still we
like to watch

or how about this-

bruce was a bad actor
but at least lee tried

6 Feb 05

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I contend that Bruce Lee was deeply spiritual and in turn was somewhat of a thespian. This is a pretty nice poem however.
 — InMyBlood

love it but with so few words to write with i would think the first line would not repeat the title
 — hank

the 12 word limit includes the title.
 — unknown

I don't like this poem at all. That's just my personal opinion, but I disagree with it.
For one thing, I read it more as an insulting poke at broken English (or Engrish, or whatever you call it), rather than embracing it.

There's no real way to read this other than what it says. In other words, this poem comes off as a not-so-clever, attempt at being clever and humorous. There's not really much I can say about this, as a result of the fact that it's so direct and leaves little room for interpretation or actual thought- this is a major flaw in the poem.

I don't think this is a complete and direct attack, so much as a causal poking-fun-at type thing, and yes, Martial Arts movies recieved by North America tend to have terrible acting (with a few rare exceptions), but I don't think it's really a very good subject for a poem.. Unless you were the weave some kind of a complex metaphor, or cultural analysis in which you compared poor acting in Martial Arts movies to.. say.. traditional Chinese performances, etc.

Anyway, that's about all I have to say. I wasn't terribly impressed by this at all, despite working within the 12 word limit.
 — Inuki

i mean for the reader to ask himself,
"why do we like to watch?"

the first version was,

Bruce Lee was a bad actor
but he tried his best.
 — unknown

it would be nice if bruce lee said,

"it doesnt matter if youre bad
in some things
if you do what you love
youre alive
and people know it"

but i dont think he did.
 — unknown

I still think its great
 — InMyBlood

um, i really don't have much of a comment for you, it's missing quite a lot, i mean, some people can write four lines and tell the greatest story, but with you it's diffrent , you need more addition to it.
 — Gabriella

do you have any more of that poetry could you send it to 775 ruffind rd.
 — unknown

man fuck u bruce lee was the best man who ever lived still 2 this day
 — unknown

You're right, he wasn't much of an actor. He was a martial artist and one of the best that ever was or will be. He was charasmatic too. Maybe that's why he caught on so much. However most of his movies weren't very good unless he had better actors in them like Enter The Dragon or Game Of Death. Too bad, I was expecting a poem about him and his real art and all I got was four lines on his bad acting!
 — wamblicante

gnormal what little respect i had for you has vanished. you are worth nothing to me. people say i have no regard or morals here. morals maybe but do show respect for talent, while ive seen none on this site, i saw plenty from bruce lee, not just as a martial artist, but as a director, artist and philosopher. you should learn respect for those who out rank you, perhaps you would have better appreciation for master lee if you watched the game of death with a critical eye. look beyond the surface. you are out of line with this poem and for all that is good in this world i demand you take it down.

of all the people why am i giving this advice?  
 — TheO1dCrow

Confucius say:
Bruce Lee was a bad actor
and you a worse poet.

Lucky #s 7-16-24-11-43-9
 — unknown

if the lucky numbers dont match your age the fortune is untrue.

those are the rules.
 — TheO1dCrow

what ev . . .
 — unknown

yea showed you, bitch, go crawl back under your rock like the punk ass mother fucker you are. next time you best know your place.
 — TheO1dCrow

yeah, right on top of your mama, score for the punk ass!
 — unknown

take my mama if you want, you could use all the help you can get i bet its better than getting raped by your grand paw but then again maybe you like old men and incest, ha you and shaved cunnie would get along great.

right back at your punk ass, buddy!
 — TheO1dCrow

why so mad panda bear? dude, you seriously need to get yourelf into some anger management classes, all that pent up rage, your like a bitch that's been on the rag for over month, take some Midol sugar.
 — unknown

god, ive been looking for a good show for so long. but when you come from a descent family and 14 yr of catholic schooling, you get a little stir crazy. at least im not being taught by preists. otherwise i swear i would have been excommunicated by now. also at least my school is coed, god i love women.
 — TheO1dCrow

oh and forgive me if i start a fight about this but whats with the panda bear stuff? what show did that come from?
 — TheO1dCrow

suck my ballz.. gnormal
 — unknown


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 — fractalcore