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We Only Know how to Live Cliche
TPTNW

Lip-gloss
 1
       smeared on
 2
             a beer bottle
 3
               Both hands
 4
             tightly
 5
           clutch the throttle
 6
        Another packed parking lot
 7
     another drunken fight
 8
   Jim got mad at Jack
 9
  Jack pulled out a knife.
 10
Her entire emotional capacity is written on the
 11
   the bathroom wall
 12
     His dreams lie under his hood
 13
       their hearts pump to the rhythm of sloppy  
 14
          techno mixed in with a hip-hop beat
 15
               to make them feel real
 16
                   remind them they run the streets
 17
              
 18
               If Jack and Jill went up the hill to fetch
 19
               some water
 20
               Then J and Illian went into the janitor's
 21
               closet for a quickie.
 22
      
 23
 
 
Lip-gloss smeared on a beer bottle
 24
  
 25
Another girl pretending she loves a man
 26
 
 
Another boy finding manhood in beer-pong titles
 27
            
 28
Welcome to teenage waste land.
 29

23 Jul 05

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-smirks- I like this.
 — MissMay

good!
 — lonelygirl

i read this before but for some odd reason didn't comment. hm..this was very nice. I loved the format, the title, the first three lines, and about everything else on here. lovely work
 — Gabriella

you could take out the second lipgloss smeared on a beer bottle and the poem would be more to the point.
 — unknown

huh.
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bleh.
 — unknown

very well done, i really enjoyed this poem. though L29 sounds like a certain song :p overall very nice and a nice image of teens today. good job :D
 — SweetPain

well done

"i don't think you understand these kids--you, with your prescribed apathy--we're losing them" --Donnie Darko

the reason i plan to teach high school--thank you for the feeling these words contain--powerful indeed
 — basketpacker

i like this so true....
 — UrbanAng3l

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