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one true love
coodaygraw

whisper my name so soft and low
 1
love songs play on the radio
 2
shadows dance and warm breezes blow
 3
this is a night made for love
 4
 
 
lay soft caresses on my skin
 5
love me so sweetly, then love me again
 6
and i pray, there'll be no end
 7
to this night made for love
 8
 
 
there's no reason to be lonely
 9
if you have a one and only
 10
love affair
 11
someone who cares
 12
just for you
 13
 
 
raindrops dancin' on the water
 14
honeysuckle smells, cryin' whiporwills
 15
singin' for you, and me alone
 16
on our magic night of love
 17
 
 
moonlight dripping from a starry sky
 18
makes me realize, you're the only one for me
 19
and you'll always be
 20
my love
 21

1 Aug 05

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Sappy; nothing more than a raw reflection; if that's good enough for you, then the poem is fine.
 — Hear

hear, of course it's a raw reflection, that's what it was meant to be. if writing a love poem to your wife is sappy, then so be it. maybe some day you'll understand
 — coodaygraw

Then I guess the poem is fine.
 — Hear

Great song lyric
 — larrylark

aw, this is sweet (1st reaction) ... but then considering it is written for your love of 45 years: this is profound.  thanks.
 — asklepios

beautiful. I was enjoying the sentiment..and then as I read the part about the honeysuckles smell, it suddenly became more! and I could imagine the sitting with the one I love under a huneysuckle woth the raindrops dripping down from the leaves even and "dancing" on the water..oh there is little more beautiful than this feeling of deep pleasurable love! Pay no head to love skeptics. It doesn't have to be a tricky poem it just has to be real or magical for someone to make it worth while
 — Riverwriter2

I read and write based on one loose criteria - never to mention by word what it is I am writing about. Very rarely can a writer word the main theme or issue into a piece of poetry and expect to pull it off; I see that "love" is written no less than eight times here - eight times too many for my tastes. Fourteen to sixteen are good, the rest descends into too much sentimentality. I agree for the most with Hear's comments - fine for something written for someone, but this wouldn't stand a thorough critique.
 — wendz

I feel like the poem ended after the first two stanzas, they set up a good pattern and the third stanza comes in and it never seems to come back again. in quite the same way.

And yes, it is sappy, I more or less agree with wendz, that love is a word that can be touching and beautiful anywhere, but poetry. The whole point of poetry is to transcend words.

However, i do like the thought of a night made for love. So, consider leaving love #2 and #8 see what you can do about the rest, a "night made for us" can be just as sweet.
 — katt

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