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Infinity
Riverwriter2

I thought we were a world away
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But it was only a word
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And even that could not separate us
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And even flesh will someday be broken down
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after our last murmurs have circled the earth.....
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For now, it is the stillness between breathes-that is the movement of our love
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our cheeks rosey with it's warm vibration
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And as we lie close to our pillows- skin against cotton
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Tongues against teeth, eyes against the darkness of lids
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I am mindful of it
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That there is no separation
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And that is why when you sing and I talk
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We are both still listening
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I have loved my piece of sky because of its infinity
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And it is you and I
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My other user names are Riverwriter and RuiHanShi; this is due to password problems

6 Aug 05

Rated 7 (8.2) by 1 users.
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Inactive (6): 1, 8, 8, 9, 9, 10

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murmur...Earth...

This is SUPER.  Well done
 — themolly

Thank you!  Ihave been waiting for someone to comment / critique my poems for days.  I also write under Riverwriter and RuiHanShi. I would really appreciate a comment or two on some of my pther stuff. I am new to the site.
 — Riverwriter2

PS the funny thing is that the only part added after is " even after our last mermers have cirled the earth"
 — Riverwriter2

You have to learn to spell.  We're big on spelling and grammar.  Another very lyrical lovely poem which I shall come back to.  You have good bones, just need to learn how to pad it nicely.  
 — Isabelle5

Woops I didn't realize I spelled murmur that way! But thank you for the compliment.  As far as bare bones goes ...It was meant to be as simple as possible. I am not sure what you mean by pad it nicely, do you have any particular suggestions Isabelle5??
 — Riverwriter2

You write very well, I hope you resolve your password problems.
 — Meep

Thank you Meep!  I appreciate that very much. With regards tot he password, Yeh me too.  I haven't had too much of a proble this week and have been able to stick with Riverwriter2. Will you plese read my poem waiting for the night to hold you?? I realize it is long, but I would really appreciate some feedback.
 — Riverwriter2

Good work!

Do you speak another language as a native?

Cm
 — cynthmala

Riverwriter, I tried looking for your poem but I can't seem to find it. What name is it posted under?
 — Meep

River writer, your poem?!, are you still here?
 — Meep

Nice poem, lyrical flow, good imagery.
 — larrylark

HELLLLLLLLLLISHLYYYYYYYYYYYY AEOSMOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Meep, thnak you for taking the time to look for my poem, it is under the user name: RuiHanShi.
, it is called "Waiting for the night to hold you"
 — Riverwriter2

cythmala.  Thank you. I don't speak any other language fluently, however I have learned a few things on Arabic.  Where I live in Vancouver, BC, Canada, most people speak more than one language.
 — Riverwriter2

larrylark, glad you liked this one better.thanx.
unknown thank you too
 — Riverwriter2

I really enjoyed the beginning. it was really there.
the ending is nice too.
 — misterpoet

thank you .unknown! and than you too mister poet!
 — Riverwriter2

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