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cobain
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at first there were strings.
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the universe was made from vibrations
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for those who believe that God was a Romantic
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and glide cross the slope of a fretboard,
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rust and blood--
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all passion pre-empts madness
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they talked a lot about the softness
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of heroin eyes
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Van-Gogh's harrowing china blues
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that stare back, defeated
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as if we were the mirror to your soul-
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and hollows,
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cadaverous valleys in the gaunt geography
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of your face
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swallowing the shadows
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of dimly-lit clubs
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and shrunk back into your frame
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(we did not mean to misunderstand)
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And in time it all unplugs
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a sudden withdrawal, midframe
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while we still craned our necks
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to understand
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But the earth will trample brittle souls
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And if you peer close enough,
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Seattle still grieves for you
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nothing but a wan acid drizzle
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to compensate for the lush tears
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of thin wraithlike girls
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and the millions of melodies that sounded afterwards
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with the poignant discord
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of a primitive heart-
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It is beyond us to ask why
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but for who?
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26 Aug 05

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I really dig your poems.
 — unknown

Not saying mine is any better in fact mine is completely different but for similar subject matter, check out my "UNTITLED."

Oh and I like yours.
 — TheJediPimpz

I would like this more if it wasn't about Nirvana.
 — lieskilllies

i do miss kurt. i wonder if his baby is in detox?


gonad
 — unknown

This is so flowing and still, sort of like looking into a pool that looks calm and seeing the things moving below without making a ripple on the top.
 — Isabelle5

his baby is 12....and is this the place to discuss this?
 — TheJediPimpz

RAPEME
 — unknown

l19-22 is crafted so perfectly. Its got a good rythm.

I love the feeling this gives me. its got substance and passion. Well done.
 — madderhatter

I saw the title and thought oh dear a lame poem abou Kurt Cobain, but I had to swallow my thoughts (is that possible? hmm) as this is truly beautiful (9)
 — kitkat

a great find this is.

long live KurN CobaiT.
: )
 — fractalcore

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