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Deaf
topop

Silence
 1
is an eerie ghost
 2
trying to be killed
 3
but cannot be found
 4
 
 
Silence
 5
is a luscious hole
 6
with placid walls
 7
of Ever mile
 8
 
 
Silence
 9
is reaching for everything
 10
and grabbing nothing,
 11
slipping trough your fingers
 12
like motionless wind
 13
 
 
Silence
 14
is the beginning
 15
and end
 16
the producer
 17
and destroyer
 18
 
 
Silence
 19
is painful
 20
nauseating
 21
calm
 22
wonderful
 23
perfect
 24
disaster
 25
everything
 26
nothing
 27

Line 8: 'Ever mile' is simply a term I used to mean 'forever'... a hole reaching to eternity.

3 Oct 05


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'Silence is reaching for everything and grabbing nothing". THat is the best line I've heard in a while.
 — madderhatter

i think this is the kind of poem that would benefit from having no capitals at all. and i don't think i understand line 8.

as for the last stanza, you are just saying words. why not describe them, like you have in the previous stanzas? or, failing that, just delete them.

but i really like the way you have described silence in the other stanzas. nice poem, and i love lines 12 and 13.
 — Lia

yeah, i like the no caps, i just left Silence in caps. the last stanza is not meant to be described, i would rather that the reader interperet what the last stanza words mean for themselves. Thx!
 — topop

Should line 19 read Silence, not Slience?  Interesting poem.  -Peggy
 — PeggyParis

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