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on playing blues for the changing seasons.
midare

and i'll ask you just once  
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again:  
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what did you do  
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with all of our colors? and he,  
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once again,
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will only remember leaving.  
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on trees that tumble so
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unevenly, feet unearth  
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loam. leaves stride--  
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time will tell,  
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eventually.
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8 Nov 05

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I like this; it portrays a story, as minute as it may be.  =)
 — Aziel

do you think you have the best stanza order here>? otherwise good words.
 — bettalpha

thank you for all the wonderful comments.
i appreciate them.
you are a talented writer in every sense of the term.
 — pull_my_hair

i looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooovre you
 — unknown

i found this when i opened the site.
this is incredible.

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