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Silence
Lioness723

The distance is too much
 1
if I cannot feel your breath
 2
on my cheek
 3
 
 
My own voice echoes
 4
in my head
 5
and in this room
 6
empty without you
 7
is it really me I hear?
 8
 
 
I'm left here wondering
 9
do you miss me
 10
do you wish you were here?
 11
are you really there
 12
alone?
 13
 
 
Don't answer
 14
if the truth would hurt
 15
 
 
In this distance
 16
this eternity of space
 17
my mind is left racing
 18
bruised by lonliness
 19
band-aided with jealousy
 20
do you miss me?
 21
 
 
Can you hear me?
 22
Hello...
 23

6 Apr 02

Rated 7.5 (5.3) by 2 users.
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Comments:

Last two lines bugged me, just doesn't fit; the last line especially. Gave it a 6
 — TonyRay

last two lines bugged me too. bugged me big time.
 — unknown

I like this poem alot, I understand it completely.
 — unknown

i, for one, love the last lines, and wouldnt change them.
 — collx

aylo?

ya ear may?
 — unknown

hmm...
: )
 — fractalcore

how does a poem from 2002 get bumped up?
 — funes

I think the last two lines are perfect
 — JTigger831

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