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If valor could speak
katt

I think, this is as much a reminder to myself, as it is a comment on society.

You say
 1
you admire the brave
 2
those who sacrifice everything
 3
for truth
 4
justice
 5
and freedom
 6
 
 
I’m sorry,
 7
I don’t believe you.
 8
Your hiding belies
 9
your true personality.
 10
 
 
You talk
 11
like all the others;
 12
spineless slugs living in fear
 13
of death
 14
poverty
 15
exile
 16
and names.
 17
 
 
Do you really expect to make it to heaven?
 18
Do you really want to be noticed?
 19
To be remembered for all time?
 20
 
 
I say you
 21
have been
 22
are
 23
and always will be
 24
a forgettable coward.
 25
 
 
You are one of the thousands
 26
of fearful, tolerant masses;
 27
all
 28
illegitimate children of freedom.
 29
 
 
You are my greatest enemy.
 30

5 Feb 06

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damn. harsh, but true. and lovely.
nice poem.
 — unknown

Harsh is a good word for this. Probably the sort of thing that we need to remember to fix things in the world.

One thing, in line 21-22, you say "I say you have" but you need it to be "I say you have been" so that it fits with the rest of the sentence. Otherwise, it says "you have be a forgettable coward."
 — phyridean

  thanks for pointing that out. I was really hoping i cold make that line a one word line, but alas.

than you to everyone else who commented and rated.
 — katt

oh yah baby!

suk mein
 — unknown

did i say that?

dang
 — unknown

i really like this. i like it because it's one of my favorite kinds of poems, the kind that flow down in somewhat short lines but hit home completely. line 25 made my stomach tingle. which is a good thing. use of the world valor in title somehow adds to the poem.
 — listen

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