| A commentary on "being careful what you wish for"
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bear
| The monkey said to God, | 1 |
"I want a brain." | 2 |
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"A brain?" said God. | 3 |
"That can bring pleasure | 4 |
or pain." | 5 |
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Our primate friend did not care | 6 |
he said "all I am is flesh and hair." | 7 |
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So God said "yes, but | 8 |
you'll make this world | 9 |
a huge mess." | 10 |
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Always God was right | 11 |
and little monkey can't sleep at night. | 12 |
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27 Feb 06 |
Rated 6 (8.5) by 1 users.
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Comments:
This is a great truth, indeed.
Most of the time people are not aware about what they desire! If they did, they would be more careful.
I liked this poem of yours!
— MaiteF
very nice and i loved teh creativity in it koodos to you
— unknown
The rhyme scheme is kind of rought, but I laughed all the way through it!! Nice topic, I like it very, very much.
— KaraQ
this as most of your other poems is thoughtful and you're wit is sharp and sarcastic....
i definately like it.
oh and i finally broke down and joined the site....
~sister bear
— rubytuesday
so you're his sister? hooray for my sluething skills, once again.
(i checked your profile, as i do most new people here, i saw "kerr" in your email, and immediately thought of bear).
but i didn't say anything cos i was too lazy.
— inutile
great poem, but work the line breaks a bit more to improve the rhyme. as it is, it's not subtle enough, but not neat, either.
— inutile
nice reply to gnorm's piece.
— unknown
thanks for all of your comments.
what was gnorm's piece, unknown?
— bear
This is the ACME of your poetry career.
— unknown
i do not know what that means unknow...
— bear
I love this poem! bc i like monkeys! theres so fun, e e eeek eeek ee ee eek ooo oo o I love you!
— unknown
Not great poetry but slightly funny.
— Isabelle5
It's a good poem.
— Meep
you are right isabelle, it could be better written. i am a little blocked up right now.
thanks meep!
— bear
Not seeing much sharp wit with this.
Mildly amusing at best.
— SeanConnery
eh, true mr. connery. but i like the word mildly.
— bear
God, bear, how much I've missed your short insights!
— wendz
mmm thanks? made the change
— bear
I love this poem.
I do.
Thanks for posting it!!
— Mic2
haha i liked this
— psychofemale
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