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Green Grass
Brandxxx

im allright
 1
over the hills with the sunlight
 2
now falling on top of the green
 3
green
 4
grass
 5
end
 6
wake
 7
button press
 8
open the shade
 9
wash your face
 10
toothpaste
 11
pepsi
 12
step into the world
 13
with that great dream in your head
 14
hold on
 15
to it
 16
its not going to get that good here
 17
toast
 18
touched face and the mirror
 19
mocks
 20
for sale today
 21
pushed for the money
 22
step, step, smile
 23
shake hands and fall over in your head
 24
... what a beautiful dream
 25
"hey wake up, dumbass"
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snap out of it and apologize
 27
so good at waiting
 28
in this rut
 29
forever
 30
im just saying...
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i wish heaven were real.
 32
dark now
 33
going home
 34
cracked sidewalk
 35
heart's still beating
 36
door
 37
key
 38
undress and yawn
 39
button press
 40
sleep
 41
im alright
 42
over the hills with the sunlight
 43
now falling
 44
on top the
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green ...
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green grass
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18 Aug 03

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Oh, what a fun poem to read. Pepsi for breakfast, a wonderful dream to take you through the day.
 — Isabelle5

Interesting view of a world....
 — BloodDrip

This poem sounds cool when read aloud, it seems to have a flow to it. The message I'm not so sure I understand, but I have my own interpretations. It may just be all the thoughts that run through your head in the morning, for the thoughts are all so diverse. Well done.~Chris King 10/10
 — FrChris

This was a really shallow, annoying poem.
 — unknown

thank you
 — Brandxxx

I don't think this site should support drugs.
 — unknown

i dont understand. do you think i take drugs ? ok.
 — Brandxxx

mm..i really like your stuff. its very interesting, very raw, yet it has a lot of finesse.
 — wendz

That was powerful, original style!  I like it!
 — Infrangible

Wow, thats a incredible poem on so many levels.
 — Andrew

Rather quotidian, if you ask me.
 — noodleman

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