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The Design of Eventuality
Brandxxx

the mechanical rotation of a failing
 1
smiling figure
 2
on a covered beach
 3
grey stone fuck
 4
what a dream what a dream
 5
the falling snow
 6
of a face never realized
 7
you're not real here
 8
and being grim is nice
 9
dont you think honey
 10
mechanized sunrise
 11
together in the end
 12
when is it time to fade
 13
i fidget
 14
i struggle in
 15
the wake of
 16
nothing of importance
 17
throw it all away
 18
and bring your chairs
 19
to the beach
 20
and throw your clocks
 21
in the water
 22
we're not happy
 23
we're not happy
 24
we're not happy.
 25

20 Aug 03

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I know it's not the poet's intent, but I keep reading figure as figurine in line 2. This echoes of radiohead. But I love radiohead. And I love this. But uh... not for that reason. yeah.
 — Ananke

minor note, your should be you're in line 8
 — Ananke

oops thanks for pointing that out
 — Brandxxx

striving but not there yet
 — unknown

thats the story of my life
 — Brandxxx

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