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Stress In The Workplace Causes Accidents
musicwords

“A rosé by any other name would smell as sweet”
 1
he cites,
 2
and he is smart
 3
because he knows Shakespeare                                
 4
                                                                   (and because he holds
 5
                                                                          his wine glass
 6
                                                                                   by
 7
                                                                                   the
 8
                                                                                  stem)
 9
 
 
They stand,
 10
sidebyside
 11
but he is careful
 12
not to brush her skin.
 13
 
 
She is dark and quiet,
 14
her eyes suggesting promise
 15
                                                                   (but never delivering)
 16
 
 
They smell of philosophical novels
 17
and cellars [f i l l e d] with wine
 18
 
 
I smell of bitterness
 19
and minimum wage
 20
as I hand them another rosé.
 21
 
 
She spills just a little glowing wine
 22
onto my uniform of grey
 23
                                                                   (as his hands spill onto my backside)
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The party is in full swing
 25
-how droll!-
 26
as I pull out my gun
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and
 28
shoot. them. both
 29
 
 
twice . .
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Blood mingles
 31
with the ostentatious carpet
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                                                                   (in a satisfactory manner)
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My dignity
 34
(I muse)
 35
is worth a little more
 36
than
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£4.94
 38
an hour
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16 Mar 06

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I like this but the format is dodgey. The words in the brackets don't exactly stay in your head. I think you should take out the brackets and move the lines so they're part of the stanzas. But hey, it's only my thoughts.
 — DeathShards

Why the accent marks on rose?
L10- the comma is not needed
L29- if you must put a period after shoot and them, follow through with one on both

I agree with the previous comment full-heartidly.  The parenthises don't really add anything and are slightly distracting.
I like this ok, but I feel you could fine-tune it a bit.  I'm hypocritical in saying that, because I have no idea how to fine-tune anything.
A good write, all-in-all.
 — fallinforyou

I'm so enthralled, I can't even pull it together to make a good comment.

Exciting. New. Sexy. Sensual. Clever. Lovely.

Extremely enjoyed - you're talented.
 — WordsAndMe

PS:  no removing brackets - i find them effective!!!
 — WordsAndMe

Thank you WordsAndMe, what a lovely comment. And thank you to DeathShards, and fallinforyou for you comments and suggestions. I will think about what you have said carefully.

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 — musicwords

fallinforyou
number one, the accent marks are totally part of the poem! the play on 'rose' and 'rosé' is what makes the bloke seem so insufferable. the comma in line 10, though un-needed, adds something to the flow, as if the writer is asking us to stop and THINK about what the prior statements mean. and the missing period on 'both' doesnt distract in fact once again adds to the flow.
it's fantastic, i love it. my fav poem
 — unknown

Wow, last unknown, you sound like a suck-up.  Oh, and pardon my own unknowness.
 — unknown

Let's all be unknown. Or not.

Last unknown, comment the poem or sod off.

Unknown before that, you do sound like you're sucking up. But isn't it great?
 — unknown

Ok, fine, here ya go:

First, parentheses usually suggest a change in thought, not a continuation of a thought, like it is here.  I suggest that you change those parentheses into commas.  They are usually used for the purpose that you seek.

Second, what the hell is rose'?  Is it a wine, or a rose?  I am confused and baffled by what rose is supposed to be.

Finally, why would the waitress go psycho?  It's her damn job to serve them.  She's not even being insulted.  I could see she losing her dignity if she were being insulted for accidents, but she isn't.  The character is totally unbelievable.

Now then, I think I'll leave this unfortunate little burg and move on.
 — unknown

How have I not seen this poem before.
This is one of the most engaging poems I've ever found on PC      
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                       ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;  (or anywhere)

May I be your agent, please?
I am old and have no contacts.
Plus, I never pass on royalties.
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                       ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp; (he's kidding)

But I do tip well drag queens,
the only Royals on these shores
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                       ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;  (oh, snore!)

But seriously, this poem is fantuckinastic!
I love it! I've found a unique poet!  What a voice!
And this is only the first poem of yours I've ever read!
And you do this stuff yet you are only eighteen!

Do you know you will be famous someday?
If not in poetry, I'd be surprised.  I mean,
you are some kind of polymath.  Make it big in other fields
but never turn your back on words.
Remember me when I am dead
Remember those who pushed you on

-Center stage- is calling you.
Only it does not know your name.


I am happy now.
wow

this poem

wring me up, I'm sopping wet with laughter for your poem
and joyful tears (well, figurative).

My shirt's now shredded (Oh, you thought I'd cried? No,
and


I only pissed myself.  


I never -cry-)

10
 — netskyIam

funky failure of tetto's code.
dunno all that nbsp junk: I only put parenthetical off to the right.

can I give you another ten for the trouble

sawwwy,
r'y
 — netskyIam

this is no suck up.
It's genuine mutual admiration for some one extraordinary
has just met another extraordinary  of vastly different and
much more promising future power.

-it is like the meeting of the Atlantic and the Pacific oceans-

Either that, or a couple of unlikely fish flapping on the PC deck,
delighted to be drowning in air cos they have found each other:
the young nubile mermaid and the ancient, rimey, homosexed cephalopod.

perfect match.

I love acting silly
 — netskyIam

yes, and i (as suck up unknown) traditionally go around licking other poets arses for no reason. i genuinely like the poem, it's fantastic. and damnit, 'rosé' is a WINE, the play on words is important...
 — Thea

"and damnit, 'rosé' is a WINE, the play on words is important..."

Yes, I knew that.   A critic, meeting an unfamilar word (teens don't all know about basic wines) can do well to run a google search.  It takes two seconds.  Laziness is no excuse for diminishing a person's poetry.

sockdologizing! (google that, unkies)


-old mantrap-
 — netskyIam

L10: get rid of the comma, awkward pause.

L18: not sure if that's working for you, no. it just feels contrived when you're spacing out a word like that-- i udnerstand the meaning, but i think that's below this piece completely.

with the parenthesis, i only feel like one is truly pulling its weight, and that's the first. the other two feel a little more pointless as asides, like you're trying to point something out to the audience that they already know. you could remove them from the poem without affecting the meaning, so that's usually a sign that you should.

other than that, the previous comments are oushing you in the right direction. take a break from the piece, leave it aside and come back to it later with a red marker and tear it apart.
 — youthculture

I am very interested in opinions on the parantheses and I am certainly going to step back and take a look. Though I don't feel emotionally attached to this poem, I just like it.

To the unknown who critiqued- I always appreciate advice but your tone annoyed me. It's fine to dislike the poem but I felt you were being pointless. I disagree on your definition of the uses of parentheses. I think they can be molded and used for many different literary functions. A rosé is a wine. And finally, this poem is about now demeaning it can be to work small time jobs. It is not about the waitress LITERALLY shooting the couple, though she does so in the poem. It is meant to sympathise with everyone who has worked a shitty job and felt like shooting all the customers just to get back on top. I've worked so bad jobs, and people (say customers in a supermarket) who act so high and mighty, so far above you, well, they get you down.

I'm sorry you didn't get the sense of the poem.

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 — musicwords

A Tour
guided by netsky

=The tone of the title, applied against the opening lines,
leads to the expectation for comedic mayhem.  

=Much later on a spill occurs: she sloshes a bit of rose' on her sleeve.
Stress-related.  Is this the "accident"?  Oh, but no!

=Back to the beginnning:  It is termed "set up" in the comic business.
Our poet shows the patron uttering an utterly shallow and wonky pun on
a super-cliche quote.   (He's -sooo not clever-)
  And being British, the arse offers his bon mot with an
air of pomposity found only in the UK,  in a small percentage of the citizens.
This pomposity is hated by all who do not
yet have the means to be pompous themselves.  

=The parenthetical at the upper right is pictorial of his wine glass,
very neatly figured out.  A fine visuo-alcoholic promise of TIPsiness
to come.  

=Poet describes this man's bitch with dry economy.  
The bitch is economical, herself: she does not  give her date any more
than the minimum prescribed by date-law and circumstance
(see parenthetical set to the right).

As the hoity-toity couple make such grand small talk about
their so-refined lifestyle,  we see ! into their impressive wine cellar!
Oh, now that's  a measure of upper crusty: appreciating
the brown bottles,  for their lables.  

Our Poet serves them another glass of rose'.
She  resents them quite well by now.  
Such prigs.  So stupid.  So rich.  
(This is class-resentment, something we don't much have in the USA)

  

Any reader following this far can now, certainly, appreciate the poem.  

The Accident:

Notice how she shoots them. Both

twice.

The periods and line breaks make a dramatically funny
bleed-out onto
that "ostentacious" carpet.  

The parentheticals offset far right are a "counterpoint" ( and they do belong over there, not in the poem).

The poem is just perfect, imo.  
This poem, in its fake-macabre,
still manages to behave as lightly
as a meringue on a pie.

It is a damned good poem- a departure from convention
which does  work instantly for some,
and later on for all who take the time
to savor a finely honed vignette made in the best tradition of British humor.

  
 — netskyIam

I owe you Netsky.

Proper reply later, busy talking life.

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 — musicwords

I hate: the dashes in the title, the brackets and the structure of this. I love: everything else. I verily, verily like this. Muchly. I assume that the accent on the "rose" was intended to satirise those "arthouse" bastards? Hm I just read the comments, and it's a wine. I don't drink, so *scratches head* ^_^

I was a checkout chick for two years. And it's worse than what the spaced out faces indicate. Hospitality sucks. And her partner, Minimum Wage, blows harder.

Cheers for this, it brought back memories from better days :D
 — wendz

Ouch well, this is my first experience receiving a 1 without a commet. Cheers.

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 — musicwords

Uninspiring formatting but the ending caught me by surprise.  I thought you'd sneeze in their food or spill something on them.  I like the accent on Rose wine, it's necessary to indicate it is not the flower by the same name.  

It's fun for a poet to try to create interesting formats but it's so hard on the reader sometimes.  Simplicity is always best because it allows the reader to concentrate on the poem itself, not the fancy formats.  If it's too "clever," it won't be as much fun.  Maybe you can reformat this to be a picture of a glass, with stem.  Or the gun.
 — Isabelle5

Isabelle, thank you so much for viewing and crit-ing this. I will of course take into consideration your suggestions. I can assure you, I was not trying to be clever, only playing with my words. I understand that his does not work for you and will definitely think on it.

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 — musicwords

The ending caught me of gaurd - didn't expect that. I like the brackets - to me it's like a voice thinking outside the boundries of the reality of the poem in a way (i don't know if you meant to do this or not but it's good). I've read most of the comments and I agree with them, especially the one saying about the use of é on rosé.
Overall, thoroughly enjoyed reading, you are very talented and look forward to more of your work. If it wasn't for that thread on the message board I wouldn't have read these. If you have time, maybe you'd like to read some of mine, as i'd like some 'serious' critique.
A good poem,
Rouosseau
 — Rousseau

I commented on this before, but never had the chance to come back and see the replies.  I understand the whole accent mark.  When I re-read this it made me like it more, maybe I just didn't take enough time to consider the poem last time I read it. Anyway, splendid job.
 — fallinforyou

Different, original, fascinating, brilliant.
 — flaminhot

What can I add?  Everyone has already said it:  Excellent!  I loved it.  A fave.
 — CervusWright

Don't be so complacent, it is good that everyone is giving you compliments on it. Maybe you don't need to add to it.
 — flaminhot

Wow guys, I can not thank you enough for visiting my poem, and commenting of course.

Rousseau - What a brilliant comment. Full of useful words of advice and encouragment. Expect to see me on your poems very soon.

Pelicanpubli - I'm sorry it didn't work for you. Some suggestions would be great next time.

fallinforyou - I really appreciate you coming back to my poem, and I could not be more glad that you like it more the second time round. I always enjoy your insightful comments.

flaminhot - What can I say? You made me smile. Thankyou for visiting twice too. Your comment is of great value to me.

CervusWright - It really means a lot to me that you made this a favourite. That, for me, is a rare occurence.
 — musicwords

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 — musicwords

Quite clever, quite interesting. Perfect for my sense of humor, I laugh. This is a great progression from your other work. I am not saying that your other work is not good, I am just saying that this is the direction you should have taken, from your previous poems. I am still trying to find a style to stick with. It seems as if you have a firm style. I suggest you should break off and test new styles. I have been doing that ever since I started writing.

This is a well written piece.

I do have a question.

Why the mark above the e on rose? Is it suppose to be pronounce differently?

Besides that I would like to compliment you on your great use of word play with your grammar or, typing mannor.

-Drew
 — Him

Hi Drew,
Thanks for the comments. You can read the other crits to find out about the accent on the 'e'. As for your comments on my style, well, it's interesting you should say that because these poems are not written in my usual style, they are an experiement for me, and as the response has been positive, I will be using this style again. But yes, you're right, it is important to keep changing and moving on.

I'm glad you liked the poem.

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 — musicwords

Oooooooh...I LIKE IT!  Very sneaky and very typical of the classic disgruntled employee.  Work is such a dismal prospect, huh?  The wages, sadly, are even MORE dismal.  Great work!  I think the format is fine.  I do agree that what's in brackets might benefit from being taken OUT of the brackets for more fluidity of the language.  
 — starr

If you like them, then here you go.

-Drew
 — Him

Haha, don't worry! I'll keep playing. Thanks for the re-visit Drew.

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 — musicwords

Thank you for the input starr, and for the amazing ratings everyone. I'll enjoy it while it lasts.

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 — musicwords

I am so honoured to see this in the top-rated. I've never been there before. Thank you everyone, for the encouragement.

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 — musicwords

This is amazing, I love it.
It is very stunning and violent-but in a good way, the way we all should be. Sexy, modern, classy, and violent. Perfect!
 — FolleRouge

It reminds me of the movie "Sin City"
 — unknown

This poem is a true display of your brilliant talent, musicwords.
 — WordsAndMe

One of the best things I have read on P/C.  Great choice of words and structure.

Meep
 — unknown

FR, WordsandMe, and meep, you're words mean more to me than I can express in this comment box. Thank you for your time, and thoughts.

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 — musicwords

I've just done some work on this and I would greatly appreciate any further comments as I am thinking of entering this for something.

Cheers.

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 — musicwords

Hi,
I would open with a lower case ‘a’ on L1 to imply a familiarity between the male protagonosit and whom the statement is addressed to, also the poem’s format does not lend itself to fully correct punctuation so I would probably go lower case all through and only punctuate for effect, as on line 29, or where you specifically require the reader to pause e.g. L21.

You don’t need the comma on L2, the break and the ‘and’ are sufficient

Normally I would suggest the removal of ‘and’ from L3, but not here it provides just the right tinge of sarcasm.         &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                       ; 

I don’t know if you want to force the wine glass image or not, but if so perhaps:

            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;      (and because he holds)
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;              (his wine glass)
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                       ;by
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                       ;the
            ;          &nbs p;          &nb sp;          &n bsp;          & nbsp;                    (stem)

L10 lower case ‘they’

I’m not sure about sidebyside – it almost makes me think shoulder to shoulder, he is obviously trying to impress and I see him being angled toward her with a hint of bravado but the angle being just enough to allay any impression of aggression.

The offset wording is effective, however I fear that  [f i l l e d] will be viewed as ‘ just for effect’, and thus lose any desired impact. Perhaps something simple like ‘overflowing’? I like the image, a good way to describe a scent.  

Perhaps some could stumble on the image of her spilling on you as your rear is patted, it may be worth considering a change to you spilling the wine, this may also give a little more edge to the fact she is also shot. ‘glowing’ L22 doesn’t seem correct (I can see the image so it works, but) the word somehow feels out of place.

I would take the stop out after ‘shoot’, place one after ‘both’ and two after twice – to reflect the four bullets fired.

A very strong close.

I hope there is something of use in there!, I have avoided any social commentary as netsky has covered this very well, showing a good reader will see what is desired from the poem. I hope I don’t seem over picky - I love the poem and have had pleasure reading it and seeing it progress through the edits.

Oh just one last thought, depending on what your submitting it to / for some recipients may not accept work that has already been published and many view submission to online sites in this category.

Good luck with your submission
Rgds
Mark.
 — hobby

Ooops, the glass didn’t come out at all well, basically it is place L's 5, 6 & 9 in brackets.
 — hobby

I said to Zeus, "fucking humans, they are so stupid, bitching."

Zeus said, "yeah yeah"

I returned, "Whats worse! They turn their bitching into poetry! Can you believe it?"

Zeus, "I try not to, I try not to."

"Zeus?"

"Yeah?"

"How many licks does it take to get to the center of a toosie pop?"

"Huh, let me see. A One, a twoooooo, a threeeeeee. A threeeee"

"Thanks."

I played on a jungle gym.
 — pra3torian

Thank you so much Hobby! What a brilliant run through. I've utilised some of your ideas, as I'm sure you can see. I will indeed have to remove this poem when I sumbit it to the comp, but I shall leave the comments, just remove the text. So as not to lose all these thoughtful words.

Many thanks, again!

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 — musicwords

perfect, the flow and everything. the shape poetry within this, i love as well, especially the wine glass. so how would you pronounce the word rose with the little accent mark (is that what it's called?). would it be "rosay?" just out of curiosity, how would it be pronounced if it was the other way, with the accent slanting the other way? does it make a difference? anyway, all of that was irrelevant, this is a great piece.
 — listen

generally accents dictate tone.

so on rosé (rose-ah) the tone rises through the a to h.
\  means tones starts high but drops
V well I'm sure you've got it by now!
 — unknown

Definitely didn't see the ending of this one sneaking up on me until KABLAM, KABLAM, KABLAM and KABLAM! Like about four shots in quick succession. An interestingly scary little piece about stress. Ah, but I wonder about the title as the shooting was no accident. Perhaps "Stress In The Workplace Can Cause Death" might fit better? By the way, "by" and "the" in your first set of bracketed words should be likewise bracketed!
 — wamblicante

Quite nicely written but a bit over the top. I mean, why on earth would you shoot them both? Makes no sense.
 — unknown

I've loved this poem since the first time I read it -- about time it got some recognition.
 — WordsAndMe

You've done a really good job here - the crossover from reality to fantasy - the little observances are beautifully picked out and the format suits me fine - I think it's quite innovative and adds rather than detracts from the main body of the poem. One of my particular likes about this poem is that it follows through - the problem of the uppity couple is resolved rather than endlesly whined on about - I've just read another poem here for example, that set a scene as if the protagonist was entering a fantasy and then all they discovered was that the world was a rather bad place - you could have done that, but didn't - you took the bull by the horns and metaphorically destroyed them, making a point in the process with style and irony. A fave.
 — opal

Wambli, thank you for the support. I'm glad it took you by suprise. That is the point, of course. Sorry you don't like the title. We're just going to have to agree to disagree on that one.

Shame on you, unknown below Wambli. I can't discuss your point seriously if I have no guarantee you'll ever read it. With no name, I feel no need to comment.

Wordsandme, your unfaltering support makes me a better poet. Thanks.

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 — musicwords

man . . . you're getting more an hour than i am.

left me with a smirk. i like this. and the parentheses.
 — SteelAngel

This was a great poem. You express yourself really well. I used to serve at parties and goodness, if shooting people were legal, I would have had a field day with some of those idiots. Thank you for making me smirk.
 — MaryH

i like the story but why oh why did you format it that way
it would be more powerful as a regular poem
 — unknown

I like the formatting of the wine glass because it catches the playfulness of the poem, but I think this is too spacious for close hands on space you are constructing/ my suggestion would be to brung the wine glass in to  begin with the first ( after, and under the last e in Shakespeare.  The other lines in brackets I would place back into their stanzas and use italics.
I saw this long ago and remeber .  Not sure why, maybe just on first sight  but I had a stronger response then.
 — unknown

love it!
 — ProzacNation

so good! the ending is great. i think the ending is the most important part of the poem and u blew me away!
 — bear

Opal - What a kind, considerate, and interesting comment. Thank you very much for taking the time to write that.

SteelAngel - Haha, 4.94 is minimum wage for over 18s here. I hope your pay improves soon! Glad you liked the poem.

MaryH - I'm really happy you could identify with the feeling behind this peace. Thanks for the positive comment.

Unknown - You're not alone in that view. I'm glad you liked the words though. The format is meant, in some way, to distract. It doesn't look like it's going to be a serious poem. But it is. Seriously tongue in cheek anyway. Bam.

Second unknown - I'm really going to consider what you have said about the formatting. Thanks for the intelligent comment and praise.

ProzacNation - Short but sweet! Thanks!

Bear - I LOVE you poetry so thank you for stopping by on mine! Really pleased that the ending did it for you. It is, after all, the point.

Take care all, many thanks again for comments and kind ratings. I've never been third on the top rated before and it means a bundle to me.

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 — musicwords

i thought this was pretty good
 — sugarcookie

  i think you should have used less obvois words that gun and shoot  i  like how it twists in the middle  and  the third person ("you") steps  in and blows em both to hell.... really  like that very last part
 — never

less obvious words than gun and shoot??
 — opal

I think those words, speaking from just the writer's point of view, sort of make the point. It's meant to be blunt. I wasn't trying to dress it up for anyone, if you see what I mean. Sorry it didn't work for you but I am glad you liked other bits.

Cheers, opal.

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 — musicwords

well deserved #1!
 — bear

Wow, thanks bear. Evidently I was number one last night. Means a lot. Cant't thank everyone enough.

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 — musicwords

Cheers for the 1 and 2 ratings without comment. Really cool. Not.

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 — musicwords

bump
 — unknown

Best not to whine when you get ones. *All* the best poems get plenty of them. Take a look at My Dad by ananke -  it has eighteen. If you want a better idea of how good your poem really is try posting it at PFFA. - http ://www.everypoet.org/pffa/forumdisplay.php?f=24
 — unknown

Sorry if I sounded whiney unknown! Thanks for the link, I will check that out.

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 — musicwords

yowzayoooooowzayowza...
L5-9---that's great
L24-uhoh! just read yer hangover gizmo
and y'all used th' hands spilled thingy there...
bittuva whoopsy??
anyhoooooooooo
very well done
 — chuckles

Good grief you're right, I've used that same old verb. Must be a favourite of mine ;) I'll think of a new one for here and put it in pronto. Thanks for the praise!

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 — musicwords

whooooooooooooa, nelly...

if yer gonna change something,
i'm agonna suggest ya change th'
hangover one...

that one, i think, you've got more
freedom(due to the scene of the narrative)
to alter...
this one, however, is so damned good
as it is, and the phrase in question
much better suited to the action
surroundin' it...

so there
 — chuckles

I hope to Hades that gun was liscensed little Missy, or you're in a heap of trouble. I liked how lines 5 through 9 look like a wine glass. That was neato. Like your other poems, theres a good punch at the end. Just hope I like 'em. 9/10
 — Henry

Say, thanks Henry, that's a nice thing to say. Glad it pleased you.

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 — musicwords

droll fantasies of shooting uppity clientele as revenge for your minimum wage job and as justification for a personal, petty, bohemian jihad has little value.  please expend your talent by lifting things through sober inquiry instead of smothering them with poor verse and even poorer discretion.
 — unknown

musicwords: this is music to my ears, hell, a whole orchestra! Great poem!

And, Henry, when can I be your 'little Missy" ...
 — unknown

I'm sorry, I don't know what I was saying in my first comment [ignore it]. This is a masterpiece. :)
 — DeathShards

I like this a lot.
 — wiccanhot

Unknown, sorry this didn't please you. Construct advice rather than destructive opinion is more useful to me.

Following unknown, why thank you! And thanks for sticking up for me.

Deathshards, how kind of you to revisit and amend you last comment.

Wiccanhot, glad you liked it. Any bits in particular you like or need work.

x
 — musicwords

Oh thanks for the recent high rates, that's really nice of you all! Not often I see my poems in the top spots. Glad you're still liking this one, 'tis getting old now.

x
 — musicwords

i love the play in formatting.
i love the mood.

i love the whole thing.
 — unknown

Means a lot, thank you.

x
 — musicwords

fuckin love it. there's this song i like, it was on the tv show weeds.. i got all...all the fuckin work i need. i got allll...all the fuckin work i need.- work song by dan reeder
 — unknown

A very good read. I found this satisfying, yet am still hungry.

'glowing wine'...how delicious.

mmm...
 — DeformedLion

you could have just ticked the box
"remove from top-rated"
 — chuckle_s

why? accident at work?

youre in jail for murder?
 — unknown

"[Temporarily taken down]"

Why don't you remove it from the top rated then? Give someone else a chance to appear there rather than take up the space..........
 — unknown

Didn't know you could. Sorry for confusion. It's back now, anyways.

x
 — musicwords

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