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Girls
Brandxxx

they walk on bye
 1
they stare at nothing
 2
they laugh with eachother
 3
they torment your dreams
 4
they make you ache for them
 5
they feel everything just enough
 6
they are soft as flowers
 7
they come with small print
 8

23 Aug 03

Rated 5 (5.2) by 1 users.
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Concise. Good double entendre with 'bye'. Interesting perspectives in your descriptive, very traditional.
 — RSpiers1

I agree with RSpiers, that is cool about the word bye in the first sentence. I totally agree with this poem too. Girls do all these things. Especially for me line four. That happens all the time for me. Line eight is great.~Chris King 10/10
 — FrChris

nicely done. this poem is so true. very concise and to the point. the last line is great!
 — Mazzo

like omg this site sucks ass
 — unknown

I dont like lines 6 and 7.
 — TrueToIt

ok
 — Brandxxx

the last line would be better as "fine" sprint, instead of small.
 — unknown

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