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TITS ASS BLONDES BRUNETTES ALL NUDE
unknown

gyrating texts strip
 1
for verbal voyeurs
 2
addicted to one night stands
 3
fingering miss
 4
'look but don't touch'
 5





the joy of sex with texts




5 Apr 06

Rated 8 (7.8) by 2 users.
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Comments:

Nice. Move "miss" from line five to 4, then end with

'look but you cannot touch'
 — alicedark

nice
 — linush

i like 'look but don't touch' better. i also agree with alice on line breaks.
 — unknown

very clever.  agree w/ the line movements - but i'd leave "look" as its own line, and "but don't touch" as the last.
 — WordsAndMe

great great great. i love this, short, cynical and witty.  good work!
 — poppy_seed

brilliant.
 — amnt

thanks critics. i wrote it in a few minutes. always thought reading was rather sexual and elusive.
 — unknown

library whore
 — unknown

I keep trying to click on your title, but nothing's happening.

-ramher
 — unknown

  really ramher how could you use the same line you use when you masturbate.
 — unknown

hahah rmaher
 — unknown

i agree wit wordsandme keep it but the lines and breaks
 — delusional

i love it.
 — technolush

hahahahaha
 — unknown

cute. and no you cant touch.
 — unknown

LOL ramher
 — unknown

is good
 — unknown

HAHAHAHAHA
 — unknown

haha. catchy title. it was nice. does that mean I was turned on? no..
 — unknown

duke ra ra ra
 — unknown

how did you get so good? no, really you are amazing. can you be my mentor? wow i am just floored this is great poetry.
 — unknown

I ONLY READ THE ARTICLES.
 — unknown

hahaha. ludacris.
 — unknown

sweetness
 — unknown

oh yeah that one unknown is gay who called you a library whore. your just teasing when you say "look but don't touch."
and he/she is just Jealous that they cant touch!
 — Icy_hot

Nice, I like the comment "I only read the articles."  I like your epigram as well. Thanks.
 — boromir4121

wheres the pussY?
 — unknown

believe me the pussy here is so bad you would want dick
 — unknown

hahaah unknown
 — unknown

hello stalker
 — unknown

Golly it is a wonderful thing the internet. The more it grows through the years the more needs it seems to be able to satisfy.

Larry pole dancing Lark
 — larrylark

THIS SHOULD BE MODERATED
 — unknown

why?

given your brains you should be moderated by a 24 hour sitter
 — unknown

Still really like this :) That title is great - how can you Not read this after seeing that title lurking on the right hand side of your screen?
 — WordsAndMe

i dont get it? can you explaine?
 — unknown

love the title wheres the sex?


suqqi fuqqi
 — unknown

simple and deep just like you
 — unknown

nice
 — unknown

lol
 — unknown

It has been decided that it is imperative that i have a mobile phone,the possession of which i have resisted for years, so i might try this after i have spent a year trying to get to grips with how to work the damn thing.

Larry carrier pigeon Lark
 — larrylark

what the hell is that larr?
 — unknown

gulp
 — unknown

LOLOLOL
 — unknown

LOLOL
 — unknown

hahah interessement
 — unknown

wow....i like the tittle..hahahaha

very good :)
 — BarkatS

Read but dont dust
 — unknown

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