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Violence is Sometimes the Answer
MrChris

Most answers were B as usual
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with few A's and fewer D's
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and C's about as equal as B's.
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Question 21, most likely being
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a B or a C because I hadn't chosen
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either in a while, went as follows:
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life::death as peace::
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A. harmony
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B. life
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C. tranquility
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D. violence
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I realized that though against all odds
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"violence" is sometimes the answer.
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With that, I punched the person
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to my left who had been
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copying answers since I
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signed my name,
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and then casually bubbled in D.
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1 May 06

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heh.

yay for violence.
 — povertea

line 3 seems odd
and
i realized though, that against all odds [13]?

clever. i like your poem
 — bettalpha

nice ^_^
 — katt

I liked this poem but it leaves me wondering what violence might have answered for you.  It's all about the test - give us a little more to think about.
An inkling about what violence would solve for you.
 — violet

I edited the poem a little and added lines 15-18...tell me how to make it better.
 — unknown

Violence is never the answer.
 — unknown

nice addition.
 — inutile

Thanks Inutile!! Greatly Appreciated.
 — MrChris

Wonderful poem!! Very inspiring! Inspired me to write my latest master piece.
 — MrTom

I love it!
 — violet

I don't like the fact that you say that violence is the answer and then proceed to whack the guy.  Why not just whack the guy-it would be obvious what you thought.  And besides, the question being easy to answer is awkward.  Why not write, 'besides, the question was easy', or it was easy to answer.  Something like that.
 — atleverton

I had to read it a few times. Funny, perceptive ...I could go on.  I liked it a lot.
 — Meep

brilliant, great ending, like the irony. Gotta say though the first few lines put me off with all the a, b, c & d but I got through it.
 — marieF

TAKE OUT THE APOSTROPHES!!!
Boy, this reminds me of all the multi choice tests that I slogged through - I like this a lot!
 — wendz

Thank you all for your comments. It's been a while since I've checked. Thank you Povertea, Bettalpha, Violet, Inutile, MrTom, Atleverton, Meep, MarieF, and you too Wendz. Thanks a lot for you positive and critical comments. So I should take out the apostrophes?
 — MrChris

I took out the one line " besides the question being easy to answer," right before line 12. Is this better you think Atleverton?
 — MrChris

once in high school my friend saw a kindergartener hitting another (the school was k-12). "bethany" he said "violence is not the answer"

and she looked up at him with precious moments eyes: "but i don't even know what violence is!"
 — Ananke

Since I'm seeing (C'ing??) the edited version, I don't know what it was like before, but THIS version is both childishly witty and deeply insightful. Lovely poem for a Saturday a.m. with coffee spilling in my lap...
 — unknown

Yea LOL  That person deserved it
 — larrylark

Haha, very witty.  Didn't expect that punch to come at all.  Nice work!
 — vardaman

haha, i like poems that make me laugh on a grey afternoon :)
 — oracle

great poem! at first i was like "okayyy where is this going???" but when i finished it i was impressed. it doesnt have the normal rhetorical strategies that most poems have, which is risky, but you made it work!
you are seriously the best poet i know. there are great poets in my class. but its poems like these that distinguish the great from the talented.
 — unknown

oh btw....the comment that is above this one
[great poem! at first i was like "okayyy where is this going???" but when i finished it i was impressed. it doesnt have the normal rhetorical strategies that most poems have, which is risky, but you made it work!
you are seriously the best poet i know. there are great poets in my class. but its poems like these that distinguish the great from the talented. ] was from me, Megan, ur pen pal  LOL...u know the meaning.
 — unknown

I love this poem. 10
 — Jillian

fingers, guitar's holes, sax, or violins.

take your pick and rock it!
: )
 — fractalcore

Very entertaining, I enjoyed the twist.
 — unknown

HAHAHAHA!  That's funny, I just did a survey today and one of the questions was about when I might consider physical violence on someone.  Co-incidence!
 — Isabelle5

ha ha i didn't see that coming this was great...
 — foreverknown

wow
that's kinda funny
:)
 — hopexRAWR

Cool idea-awesome poem.
 — JKWeb

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