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This Time

This is the fear
of loving someone
more than they ever
This is the time
we went to that
place and took out
the things that mattered most.
This is me wondering
why I am writing this.
I know this is terrible.
And I am still wondering
why I feel I love her more
than she could ever love me.

8 May 06

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I like the sparce tone.  Is there a concrete image or some specific details that could really suck in the reader so they don't think that they are reading some abstract thoughts?  Like what are the things that matter most?  
 — marshponds

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