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This Time
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This is the fear
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of loving someone
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more than they ever
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could.
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This is the time
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we went to that
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place and took out
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the things that mattered most.
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This is me wondering
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why I am writing this.
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I know this is terrible.
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And I am still wondering
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why I feel I love her more
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than she could ever love me.
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8 May 06

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I like the sparce tone.  Is there a concrete image or some specific details that could really suck in the reader so they don't think that they are reading some abstract thoughts?  Like what are the things that matter most?  
 — marshponds

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