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fallibility of language
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She opened her legs to  
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"You are as beautiful as a wandering winter sun."  
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shut them  
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indefinitely
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            when her blood
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               gave her no  
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               crimson sky.
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hazardous expectations

12 May 06

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v fallible writing
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repost as well by the looks of it.
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fallibility of the poet
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Is this about...More a riddle than a poem.
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you could of made the "crimson sky and wandering winter sun"... more relevant for metaphorical imagery.... the idea of it is promising but it doesnt deliver, kinda makes ya think you put the title in mind of its quality....
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Actually, this is a poem about a woman, hot, passionate and ready to be taken only to realize that she has gotten her period.
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very
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No.
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hmm...
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sad
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