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summer air feeling
topop

I needed to write
 1
as if I were the summer
 2
and as if it were raining unsweetened iced tea
 3
that I could sweeten.
 4
 
 
I needed to reach to the sky where clouds live
 5
put one on the dew-dried grass
 6
lay my head down
 7
and look through the hole where the cloud lived.
 8
 
 
Then I should walk home
 9
through a Thunderstorm with the rain
 10
soaking my hair - so I wouldn't have to shower.
 11
I would sing.
 12
 
 
I want to take a brilliantly bright yellow flower
 13
put it in a rustic vase
 14
so that I could feel bohemian.
 15
eating a buttery Croissant.
 16
 
 
I really should fall asleep
 17
in a bed, on Top of the white sheets - pleasantly,
 18
surrounded by an aura of warm air, drifting
 19
into my dreams.
 20
 
 
until the beams wake me,
 21
no piercing beeps,
 22
smile, along with the sun,
 23
eats some eggs,
 24
step outside.
 25
again.
 26

30 Jun 06


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and as if it were raining unsweetened iced tea  
that I could sweeten.

perhaps you could change either unsweetened or sweetened to a synonym.

love the idea of the second stanza

The randomness of 12 is nice (:

Why's Top capitalized in 18?

Did you mean: by an aura of warm air?

I like the yellow ending. Nicely wispy.
 — povertea

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