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WHAT IS WHAT WE KNOW
gnormal

What we know for sure:
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All's: an It, or You, or Me.  
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And this is It for Us.
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YOU. HERE. ME. NOW?
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But watch this Notable Trick:
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NOTE: TABLE
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    poof
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NO TABLE!
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Now you see "it"
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Now you don't.
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You think, "therefore,"
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                                  but
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You are,
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  not able to
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  note table so,
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are You?
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You know(.)
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You are.  
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What butt
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am I?
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Things are(.)
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words, but(.)
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Words are.
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From poems,
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WE GOT BUT US
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(p.s. you now i me it.)
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repost.  this time with confidence.

25 Sep 03

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lmao
I love it.
It's not just ridiculous. There is actually something behind this crap exterior which is quirky and amusing. [though this might be cause i'm an IB student and have had 'i think therefore I am' imprinted in my mind]
It's still ridiculous. but ha!
Ofcourse the concept you're [not]carrying is inconsistent so it's a pile of crap... not that it really had much hope
but yes; ha.

What we know for sure:
All's; an It, or You, or Me
And, this is It for, Us.
YOU. HERE. ME. NOW?

that would make the concept work
how ridiculous am i nevermind you for being so fucking serious about this...

 — unknown

Fantastic :)
 — Spica

I became dizzy on about line 12 and passed out...
 — unknown

since you posted it with confidence I resect it. Anyone that can post crap with confidence is a badass in my book. Nice work.
 — unknown

unknown1,
it makes me happy that someone paid attention.
not sure why the commas in line three.
with the commas, it seems to make less sense.

note to self,
i almost forgot that (.) looks like a butt.
 — gnormal

gnormal, you are the greek god of wit.

-root
 — unknown

This speaks to me and i think its fantastic. THIS IS WHAT POETRY IS ALL ABOUT. Well done sister.... Frank Loves Your Work. and if Frank Shotenass loves your work you are already a star. THATS WHAT IM TAKING BOUT!!!!!!!!!
 — short1

God bless
This existential nonsense

IS it Brilliant, for itself?
 — catcher

very e.e. cummings.
 — unknown

Well honestly Im not a fan. But I have to be because Im part of the elitest group.
 — InMyBlood

Likewise.
-wendz
 — unknown

It makes no sense. Its utter nonsense. Its horrible. It has no purpose. I am at a complete, loss of words.
 — marchhare

5 false sentences and a loose comma is not a helpful critique.
 — gnormal

ooooh my god. this is............. fabulous
 — sabz3003

nor are two fragments and a quadruple elipsis.
 — gnormal

hmm...not even this bet i.
right am i?

(you know i me it.)
: )
 — fractalcore

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