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GOES WITHOUT SAYING
gnormal

IF MY CELL DIES
 1
ILL SEE YOU LATER
 2

i lived a few blocks from the wtc in september.

23 Apr 02

Rated 8 (5.7) by 1 users.
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Nice, really says something in a really small ammount of words.
 — Point5

This one isn't doing anything for me yet, Norm.
 — unknown

My answer to this one is:

MY DNA IS INTACT. BONE, HAIR, NAIL CLIPPING.
SEE YOU IN ONE THOUSAND LIGHT YEARS
 — antipoet

this one is doing the most for me out of any of gnormal's. maybe i'm just a sap though.
 — unknown

Meh. Sorry.
 — unknown

what.... does "cell" mean "cellphone"?

 — unknown

GOES WITHOUT SAYING.
 — unknown

but so glad it was said.
 — unknown

there are lots of great poets on here, but it is [ones like] gnormal that keep(/s) the site interesting
 — unknown

I don't know why I never rated this before. I've read it a number of times and even though I know what it says pretty much word for word now, each time I look at this I stop and am taken aback. I really don't know.

yeah.
 — semaj

prison cell, terrorist cell, cellphone, ICU, later
 — unknown

this poem is weak
 — unknown

I agree. Trying to say something without really saying anything(<--- like this.)

 — unknown

If I assume you were talking to someone who worked in WTC, (which I am) then this gives me chills. If you are the person working in WTC, then it's a horrifying little poem that reminds me that no one is safe and no moment is without it's tiny held breath, to hope we make it through to the next.


 — Isabelle5

hehe very succint but cool
 — picklypickle

biological cell?
 — unknown

Boom. LIke that, this hits me. I point at your poem with hardened finger, in terror, and proclaim..."ART"
10
 — mazzy

i figured body cell from the beginning. if your cell dies, youve gone kinda bungwipe too right? you are one lucky bastard gnorm, you come up as random poem more than anyone else on this site. did you fix it to be like that?
 — wendz

I dont like this poem at all
this is definetly the worst poem I think you have written
I hate anything that has to do with september eleventh
but what can i say other than its just my opinion...
you have a few other  poems that should be top rated
definetly not this one.
 — dlong

why does everyone love all of your stuff?
what do i need to lok for to see the artist in it
 — unknown

if in line one, cell was italicized, in order to reflect the fact that is being as slang for cell phone, then that would change the whole face of this poem.  Otherwise, I'm not quite sure.  Did you mean cell as in cell phone?
 — SirBoggy

I'm not a fan of poems that are only 2 lines long. And with that said I don't much care for this. Maybe I jsut don't feel the emotion maybe in 2 lines you didn't say enough to make me feel it. Either way I don't much care for it.
 — Solstice

Ridiculous. Could you elaborate? I hate WTC shit anyway
 — LivingLies

sorry about that
 — unknown

shut yer face ugly?
 — Kauf

not directed at anyone, i just didn't want to leave it unsaid.
 — Kauf

Huh... interesting... that's all I could say. I think I get it.
 — lonelygirl

i haven't said it lately, but i still love this poem. i might be the only one.
 — jade

still cool.
 — unknown

I like the title and I like what the poem itself says.  In just two lines, it packs a punch-
A very real one.  God Bless the families of the victims of 9/11. - Starr
 — unknown

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