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Heavy Chai
jerotich

One day I will
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sip heavy chai and
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pen you post cards
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from across the world
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not knowing if you
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will inhale for my
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scent or read them
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with another girl.
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"I left although
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I loved you;
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I knew the time
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was wrong.
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Now I do well
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to forget you
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when work is hard
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and days are long.
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Just know that
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every word I write--
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each prayer and
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smile and yen--
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is more sweet
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because I've met you
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and maybe someday
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will again."
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12 Aug 06

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This is really nice. Love with an original spin,. It's not whiney or pathetis, its soulful. I especially like verse 2, that's just what I'd be thinking. Last 2 verses are nicely done.
 — themorrigan

wow something hopeful.
i like how its attempting to sound bitter but doesn't succeed at the end.
i am loving the first 2 stanzas. pretty good.
 — trochee

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