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Tears in your laugh lines
Stellaella

I imagined you with tears in your laugh lines
 1
the night I broke
 2
"slow down," you murmured
 3
through peaceful sounds of birds and trees
 4
"do not try and seize what does not belong to you
 5
accept people and places gradually."
 6
I looked at you with dry eyes and frown lines and responded,
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"what if these things do not accept me?"
 8
At these words the trees stopped and the birds were silent.
 9
I stood alone in the place where I had found you
 10
...and in the silence, I finally had the courage to let what will be, be.
 11

23 Sep 06

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line 11 is fantastic.
 — ilikeblue

brilliant.

honestly, I have nothing to say except that this is brilliant.
 — nilo

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