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The Boy with Green Hair
bear

I dyed my hair
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green for no real
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reason at all
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except for the
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fact that no one else
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really has green hair.
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Later in the week
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I almost got into
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two fights.
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Each time the
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motherfucker picked
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me out of the crowd and
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started yelling at me.
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I talked my way
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out of each  
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confrontation.
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Then I saw a
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lady who told me
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about a movie from
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the 50's about a boy
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who woke up one day
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with green hair.
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She said the movie
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was about tolerance.
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28 Sep 06

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i heard about the movie about the boy with green hair. wasn't it filmded in black and white, though?

pretty cool poem, reminds me of some of bear's earlier ones.
 — inutile

ha. i just checked your profile. fabulous.
 — inutile

i love your title.
it's a pretty cool poem.
 — Gabriella

mediocre.
 — unknown

This doesn't read like a poem to me, more like a letter to a friend.  I saw that movie when I was a kid.  Really odd movie.

ps - motherfucker is one word, not two, unless you mean something completely different when you say it!
 — Isabelle5

  . . . this a story
 — unknown

bear, bear, where's the love??
 — unknown

But a story can be in poetic form, too.  
 — Isabelle5

inutile, it is me. haha. thanks gab. thanks for the read unknown. isabelle thanks for the spell check and you know your comments are always appreciated. not sure about anything unknowns.
 — bear

and the one sucks. o well.
 — bear

kick ass. nice work.

v
 — unknown

thanks v
 — bear

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