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My Fathers 60th Birthday
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As we arrive at my fathers 60th birthday celebration
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The hairs on my neck rise in anticipation
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How can I fake this?What he caused was devastating.
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My veins pulse nervously, Im having trouble concentrating
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As we enter the grand dinningroom of this centuries old castle,
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I wonder is any reward really worth all this hassle
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The servants flock around with dinnerware fit for royalty,
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In my gut I fell guilty, with my mom lies my loyalty
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As the wine glasses empty, the party gets louder,
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Entertainment is plenty, It seems to get crowded
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Next Start the speeches, which are packed with sarcastic humour,
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I glance at my sister who is disgusted by the surface glamour
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If it wasnt our lives, it would be better than standup comedy,
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I cant sit here & listen to any more of this bullshit honoury
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As they joke about how cheap a man can be with all of his money,
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I want to jump from my seat & scream, I lived with this & it wasnt funny
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I walk away from this night with lifes most important lesson,
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That measuring ones wealth by money is out of the question
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4 Oct 06

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Dana,
Isn't it amazing how reading someone's poetry really gives you an inside look at their lives?  In this case it sure does, and I think you did a great job; it's emotional, and angry, I can feel your words.  I got an excellent visual of the "special occasion" as well.
Keep writing! =)
Jen
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