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it's frightened by her
shadowskiss

Sitting,
 1
I watch her
 2
she is restless all the time
 3
restless is her body
 4
restless in her mind
 5
she pulls at her hair
 6
carefully watching the time
 7
and i wonder if she knows
 8
they think she's out of her mind.
 9
 
 
She turns to me slowly
 10
and I already miss her eyes
 11
and when they appear
 12
I can't help but sigh
 13
she's spinning again and
 14
flying through highs
 15
she is crazy and laughing
 16
and always ready for a cry.
 17
 
 
i swear she's invicible
 18
and i know she doesn't care
 19
cause if death came to find her
 20
she'd greet it with a stare
 21
she'll smile at it slowly
 22
and forget that it came
 23
when lightning hits the ground
 24
she goes dancing in the rain.
 25
 
 
She is beauty in movement
 26
and faster than light
 27
she always knows she is wrong
 28
she always claims she is right
 29
she holds all the stars
 30
holds them all tight
 31
pulls down hard on the moon
 32
until she's ready for the night
 33
she is fast on her feet
 34
and slow on her toes
 35
and wherever the wind is shifting
 36
that's where she goes
 37
she has no desire to stay still
 38
because she knows more than us all
 39
she knows if you stay in one place
 40
things catch up far too quickly
 41
and you're just bound to fall
 42
bound to fall
 43
bound to
 44
f
 45
a
 46
l
 47
l
 48
.
 49

21 Oct 06

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Comments:

Lovely concept and flow.

However, L3, L7, L5 and L9 bother me because they are repeating the same end words. I was looking more for a different one. Especially since the rest of your poem does not follow this scheme.
Also, L39 and L40 don't flow quite as well as the rest of the poem.
 — Porcelain_Lo

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