| Magdalene
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| In the very least, be thankful | 1 |
your pimp has a name, | 2 |
perhaps no heart, but a neck | 3 |
you might put your two fine hands around. | 4 |
My man has always been God, | 5 |
and He loves like men love | 6 |
the things they sell, what returns | 7 |
as gold. The girl you were | 8 |
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would never be so trite | 9 |
as to disappear into sunset and a low bombast, | 10 |
but instead fades into soil colours and calcium | 11 |
deposits. Inside your face is another, and another, | 12 |
and only then your particular bones | 13 |
and the predictable stone of your heart, | 14 |
quartz and daintily throbbing. | 15 |
How many faces may fit inside one face? | 16 |
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Don't think I don't know what it's like | 17 |
to love, to go to bed at night | 18 |
with a knife beside you. Let the proof of it | 19 |
be scraped from the skin under your fingernails | 20 |
as evidence. Lay down alone | 21 |
on a pallet of mouths, hot | 22 |
and unfolding, to cull his fingerprints from you. | 23 |
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29 Nov 06 |
Rated 8 (8.4) by 6 users.
Active (6): 1, 1, 10, 10, 10
Inactive (21): 1, 5, 6, 6, 6, 8, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10
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Lines 8 - 10 make me crazy jealous.
— PollyReg
this has a very cool, very fast paced (chaotic?) flow to it. i can't really think of anything to say except that 'a pallet of mouths' is a very strange image indeed. not sure what that's getting at but... two thumbs up lol!
— balancing
Love 17 - 19 as well. Thats the 10.
polly
— unknown
I haven't the foggiest what this is supposed to be about. Who is talking and who is the person talking, describing? Mary of Magdalene is one perhaps, but which?
— unknown
Beautifully written
— unknown
Nicely written, unlike that worm Tetto.
— unknown
This is great. It flows from beginning to end. It has a fast pace which suits this poem and I love the content. You come across as an extremely strong poet who knows what direction your poems need to take.
Love L16.
— marieF
I wish someone would explain this to me.
— unknown
yo yo yo!! they have a new movie comin out. i'm glad i read did before the movie came out. mary magdalene was jesus christ's lover. i love jesus. this poem is so true and it get ya thinkng.
— Trudy
beautiful!
— OwlGirl
very cool
— unknown
i'd like to see line 2 be line 1.
— unknown
nice. this was written so abstractly yet it was one of those poems written so well that the reader understands it fully in their mind. you had many incredibly unique and descriptive passages which i loved, like when you wrote "as to disappear into sunset and a low bombast,
but instead fades into soil colours and calcium
deposits". also, when you wrote about the many faces being within your own, that was nothing short of pure genious. even your title was intriguing and fabulous. rock on.
— lanezfairy
OH yeah!!! This is #1 for a reason. What a FANTASTIC work of art! I LOVE L22 "lay down alone on a pallet of mouths..." Just AWESOME. Congratulations. :-)
— starr
It doesn't touch me. Nice as an intellectual exercise though. Great for those readers who are wrapped up in 'thinking' alone.
— unknown
Will you stop giving yourself tens, please. This doesn't deserve to be at number seven on the top rated list.
— unknown
The only poems I have ever given a 10 to are the egg on my face, and rixes "on marriage"
Will you stop acting like a douche, please, and tell me what's off with this poem? something in the enjambment, I suppose.
— unknown
nice style but too personal for me...
— greenmantle
absolutely wonderful...
— GreenDreams
i joined this site wanting to fullfil some sort of intellectual hunger inside myself,.......and im sure the rest of u did too. if you don't understand a poem or just don't like it,........dont waste ur time with stupid comments that offer no help! im sorry truday that whole "i love jesus thing, bla bla bla the movie (which name u didnt even mention)" was a waste of time! this site is to be critical of poetry,.......key word there POETRY!!!! if u do not understand, write or like poetry, or feel like talking about poetry get the hell of this site please!
— crismonblue
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