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grounded
ilikeblue

bill ran against her in the
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student council election of '03.
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it wasn't a very close competition,
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but at least by that time
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everyone had enough sense
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not to mention the irony.
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her favorite movie is the little mermaid and
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she is fascinated with snakes and millipedes
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(simultaneously, for different reasons).
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she cooks chinese food
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and smiles when her mouth forms the word "wok."
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she knows one day
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she will rise out of that confining chair,
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spread her
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amber
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wings and just
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fly.
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30 Nov 06

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I like her.

Why amber wings?
 — PollyReg

her name is actually amber! weird coincidence, huh?
:]
 — ilikeblue

I like it!  I especially like how line 16 is isolated.  I like it because I know the story behind it and it brings meaning to the poem, so you might wanna talk more concretely about what she is like and why she's important.  Nice work!
 — OwlGirl

okay. added a line that wasn't in the original version because i didn't want it to be so explicit. hopefully it clarifies?
 — ilikeblue

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