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i wasn't there to eat the host
bear

i didn't do a damn thing
 1
she's the one that fucked him
 2
 
 
i'm not even mad,
 3
just empty
 4
 
 
this poem is
 5
disjointed
 6
 
 
just like my life has been
 7
 
 
a used up lighter i saw
 8
in the freezing december
 9
night sums everything up
 10
 
 
i still didn't do anything
 11
i was the good one,
 12
why does this fall on me?
 13
 
 
its so hard to forgive
 14
 
 
fuck
 15
 
 
and i'm still left feeling
 16
that i should have gone
 17
to church more
 18
 
 
or something
 19

5 Dec 06

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"i was the good one,
why does this fall on me?"

Because you were the good one, of course.

Very much so, by course.

You have too much fire left to consider yourself a washed out butane.

Even a frozen lighter pulled from the December tundra could ignite so much as even the next World War - if placed in the right environment.

Fuck them. Better propellants are everywhere.
 — DeadJester

Ditch lines 5.6.7. and 15, you just don't need them.
 — unknown

a little empty, it's like you've spaced out half a poem. Not bad though.
 — unknown

its supposed to be spacey
 — bear

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