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the wake
lisac2333

I waited in line for you
 1
when I finally saw your father
 2
I just couldn’t find the words
 3
all I could do was hold him as we sobbed
 4
he whispered to me
 5
“I just don’t know how she got mixed up in this shit”
 6
I turned to see their sullen faces
 7
the other friends
 8
the ones that stuck the needle in your arm
 9
and sold you the drugs that killed
 10
 
 
When I see you the realization of prior events sink in
 11
your tiny frame dressed in jeans and a tee shirt
 12
you're blue all over
 13
the makeup is a sad attempt to cover up the scars
 14
I hear someone distant say
 15
“I can’t believe she never thought she was beautiful”
 16
placing a prayer wheel in your casket I say goodbye
 17
then turn and walk away
 18

6 Dec 06

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Had I known the girl, it'd been more sad. She was buried in jeans and a t-shirt? how different. often the clothes are of a fancier choice. 6/10
 — Henry

L13 should be "you're"

i like L16 though!
 — ilikeblue

thank you i missed that one!
 — lisac2333

I made just a few changes, hopefully this will help.
 — lisac2333

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