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Talking to you
Stellaella

Talking to you
 1
felt good the duration of my walk home
 2
casually mentioned you should contact me more
 3
told you I missed you
 4
let you blow me off
 5
 
 
let's pretend
 6
you didn't spend time slowly breaking my heart
 7
shattering the last of my shallow faith in relationships
 8
 
 
I want you,
 9
I always have
 10
so I'll smoke this cigarette for you
 11
drink too many beer
 12
and miss rolling over to you in the morning
 13
but I won't miss running into you on days when you were graciously out of my thoughts.
 14

13 Dec 06


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I think this could be fleshed out a BIT more. I know, I know, i'm not big on lengthy poems either..but I feel like the story needs a little more explanation. I enjoyed the first stanza...the second stanza I would completely remove...The first two lines of the last stanza are a bit trite and cliched. But the last line is VERY nice. keep working at it.

-lacklusterrr
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