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Response to a predisposition.
InCongruity

"The bees fizz happily, they buzz and
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come close...closer to my skin, I hold my breath--
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they sting! Always failing to surprise me."
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write to my
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wild eyed creature,
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despite my cautious nature,
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despite the seemingly learnt lesson
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I've yet to put into effect.
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Foolishly sticking around
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for more than shock value, now.
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Certain that it
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cannot be more than a minor
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stirring of the id.
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the pleasure principal is
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encouraging.
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16 Feb 07

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nice poem.

no need for the caps.

line 7: despite the lesson seemingly learnt
line 8: i haven't put into effect

lines 9 - 11:

foolishly stick around
for more than shock value;
certainly
it cannot be more
than a minor stirring
of the id.

the pleasure principal
is encouraging.


thanks.
 — varun

Made some of the changes, varun. Thank you
 — InCongruity

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