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Magic Bed, Special Dreams
Isabelle5

My bed expands at night,
 1
stretches out to realms
 2
unseen beneath the sun.
 3
 
 
My toes touch sands
 4
not made by mountains
 5
on any human map
 6
 
 
and there are special dreams
 7
when lovemaking
 8
with handsome men  
 9
is just as real
 10
as when I am awake –
 11
 
 
I wake relaxed,
 12
my hands above the sheets,
 13
 
 
purring like a cat,
 14
humming songs
 15
no man will ever hear,
 16
 
 
in a bed, small and snug
 17
and big enough for one.
 18

23 Feb 07

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Wow. Now here's something worth reading from a real person. So many poems about dreams on this site, but this is the only one I ever liked.
 — icepineapple

Isabelle5 you have scored again!
 — icepineapple

this poem rox. it makes me sleepy too, lol
 — unknown

Oh, I was revising while you read it.  I wonder what you saw while I was doing that!  You are fast readers!  Thank you!
 — Isabelle5

Isabelle, this is why I'm a big fan of yours.

You manage to bring dreams, humour, and even love into poetry and it never feels forced, fake, or cliché.

I honestly don't know why I haven't favourited all your work.

Teo.
 — teo_omega11

This is mostly forced and cliche ------- I won't say its fake. You are probably very scincere.
 — unknown

Isabelle

You are a star. Your poetry conjures up so much. Apologies for taking off my latest effort "Gunpowder By The Fire" along with your comment as it was such a pile of poo i couldn't stand to see it sitting in my file any longer.

Larry sick and fed up Lark
 — larrylark

Besides the bit about moutains making sand - this is gold.
 — WordsAndMe

Well Issie, I come to see if I can rip your poem apart since thats all you have been doing to mine when I started posting again, but I can't because it is impossible. I wish you would read something of mine you like and post on it instead of reading everthing you hate. Ha ha, I know there has to be one new poem I wrote that is appealing to you. If I could, I would write to you and only you to get your criticism.
-Drew
 — Him

Isabelle, you fascinate me.

Very well done.

-FF
 — For_Forsaken

Like the alliteration of S2.

S3 falls a bit short after the first two stanzas.

This seems like it hasn't quite found its form yet, but you've got some ideas here that seem promising.
 — rocket

Thank you so much for the kind and helpful comments.  I'll give some thought to all of them.  imc
 — Isabelle5

very good...i liked it.....its....flippin sweet..lol
 — unknown

I think this is lovely Isabelle, a beautiful poem and very creative, you present a clear vision for your reader to enjoy.
 — angrychick

Sexy, feminine and powerful images from the heart of women to the soul of man.  Very nice.  
 — starr

this is great. i love it
 — themolly

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