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and you thought
this poem was about
but what it is all
about is
life and feeling
better than you've
ever felt before:
high on life
life is high

7 Jul 07

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than l7.
 — unknown

....helter skelter
 — seekinglight

No, didn't think of drugs. Was hoping something a little different than "high on life."
 — ashley87

me too
 — bear

Never prejudge people. It always backfires.
 — erato

this is true
 — bear

one real cool
 — bear

I'm sorry but this isn't a very powerful poem.  It does not inspire much in me, certainly not a feeling of being high on life.  You've written a snyopsis of your poem, now you could round it out to make it live up to its title.  Good luck.
 — Isabelle5

cheers, isabelle.
 — bear

Cheers back, Bear.  I really mean it when I say that you wrote an outline.  I think you could do a poem about the ecstacy of life very well.  You tend to see a side of things that others don't.  
 — Isabelle5

Well done my son-Please send me the pills that got you there.

Larry body poppin' Lark
 — larrylark

haha if u want it i can get it sir
 — bear

I agree with Isabelle on this one. Put some feeling into it. the Poem is very dry and hard pressed to really call it a poem at all.
 — Solstice

Damn it...if it only it was about sex.
 — DeformedLion

it could have been.
 — bear

I would add a line to the end
'life is high'.
 — DeformedLion

 — bear

Hmm... i wasn't expecting it to be about drugs... Haha, if I had, I probaby wouldn't have read it. Poems about drugs are almost always written by people on drugs. This one... Sorry to be so harsh, but it's not much better than a druggie's poem. Just a little more coherent. And cliché.
 — radiogirl

i do use controlled substances, sorry
 — bear