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DeformedLion
DeformedLion

if I die before I am deformed
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i will become a lion
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den,
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the wind caresses
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and soft sibilant whisper,
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whispers:
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you died long ago.
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(roar roar, meow!)
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17 Sep 07

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At least I can spel.
 — DeformedLion

no "then", pleez! it makes it into journalism.

if i die,
and before i'm deformed,
i will become a lion,
roar the wind's caress --
sibilant whispers:
"long ago,
i was
a hunter,
walked the trail
in dark
green
forests".
 — joey

ok joey is this better?

your poem is fine by the way...probably better. each to his own i guess.
 — DeformedLion

"den de windt is doing what?
 — joey

its a 'poem' about nothing and then dressed up in absurdity, the clown face stares down at you. I stare at you, daring you to touch me. And its the ghost residue that makes you feel icky like you were expecting to find your fortune but you only found a man in a skivy (striped), blank, blank, blankety blank. you know?

but there is truth in this. but it belongs to me and i am letting you touch it for free, so thats your fortune and you can't tell because you are blinded by your own self-obsession...or light.
the cat just walked on the keyboard...and maybe thats what this is.
the wind is just something real, that we know, but don't be freaked out by that...its not freaked out by you.
 — DeformedLion

but i like the little word trick i added in.
 — DeformedLion

i like it! its simple. . .but i think it only seems pointless. just to those who cant possibly understand this. i think its beautiful. :) i like the idea of being dead, and yet alive. . .never fails to spartk my interest.
 — LycanStorm

well, you must surely understand it better than i do. I asked my cat what it means but all she did was lick herself.
 — DeformedLion

the word tricks great! wy do wee ned too conform to propere speling anywy!

"the cat just walked on the keyboard...and maybe thats what this is."

haha if it is this is great,


"well, you must surely understand it better than i do. I asked my cat what it means but all she did was lick herself."

best comment/critique your gonna get for this poem probably.
 — adonispillow

roar roar - meow! you lil softie at heart
 — adonispillow

oh dear
 — chuckle_s

doe, a dear, a fee-male...
: )
 — fractalcore

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