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The Tao Of Pooh
fractalcore

Those damn cameras!
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Unscathed I was let go, though;
 2
Great loot, great loss: Pooh.
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written 11/24/07

6 Dec 07

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Hoped for more with that great title
 — poetbill

same great title tempted me
 — fractalcore

I hate Pooh. Especially zen pooh, but I love your poem. It's perfect.
 — banditfemme

thanks, banditfemme.
and to you, too, unknown.
and poetbill.
 — fractalcore

it is simple and nice. i like the ending, pooh, with double meaning.
 — nisetru

thanks, nisetru.
it's a true story.
: )
 — fractalcore

i think all the energy runs out after line one... that's why it's maybe not being drooled over here. like, if you'd run a film of what the camera caught -- cause you're the one caught. maybe fake it a little -- have the clerk or the the cop playing head games with you? but, well, the concept is lame and i don't think it had the wing area to lift this one... like, "tao" is so beyond milne anyway, and pooh is either puke -- the little bear -- or shit, which is a necessity.

anyway, yeah, it was a bag of doritos from the 7-11, no?
 — joey

thanks, joey.
The Tao of Pooh
is a good book.
: )
 — fractalcore

Indeed,
it was a good book.
I don't get the placement of "though"
in the poem,
though.
=-)
 — jenakajoffer

thanks, jen.
nice to have you back.
the darn book's still in my
to-buy list after almost 10 years.
just toying with "go" and "though" here.

happy new year.
: )
 — fractalcore

YES!



























pooh
 — chuckle_s

yes?
: )
 — fractalcore

tiger woods fist pump
 — chuckle_s

tiger wouldst fish jump
: )
 — fractalcore

tiger's shrimp wood bump
 — jenakajoffer

muscles frigid cramp
: )
 — fractalcore

i absolutely love pooh bear. :embarrassed:
but this poem is pretty good too. nice.

smile!
midare
 — midare

a found poem! (?)

tiger woods fist pump
tiger wouldst fish jump
tiger's shrimp wood bump
muscles frigid cramp

:embarrassed:

: )
 — fractalcore

thank you so much,
chuckle_s, jen, and midare.
: )
 — fractalcore

Isn't it strange that comments like 'truly awful' are invariably anonymous?
 — Macbear73

hi, Macbear73. i find unks very fascinating
and that particular comment too innocuous
to get upset with. one gets used to them
unks anyway.

thanks for dropping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

Orgasmic!
 — alexisboram

thanks for faving, alexisboram.
very kind of you.

i tend to think of Pooh as a neuter
character...but very much capable
of orgasm, of course, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi. unk. you stand true to your name and
have all the unkswers you want, hehe.

kidding aside, it's a true story -- mine own.
got caught stealing the book from a famous
bookstore at some mall.

that's how idiotic i am.

thanks for stopping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

oh dear
 — unknown

I always thought this poem was by chuckes , he had a thing with pooh a while ago.
htt p://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
^ This is from aforbing's profile , makes for interesting reading.
Nice little poem , i like your explanation at the end , starr does that and i like it.
 — sir_I_clan

did i need to read Tao of Pooh to understand the poem, or am i just slow?
 — newslang5

sir_I_clan, thank you for stopping by
and for the appreciation.

i guess the link did not work.
: )
 — fractalcore

newslang5, thanks or reading.

you don't have to read the book but it's
a really good material. this piece is a true
story of my stoopeeditty.
: )
 — fractalcore

i always thought this was a clever title.

with a nice poem to go with it. nice opener for your poems.
 — listen

hi, listen.

i get into a lot of trouble and this is
just one of them occasions.

thanks for your kind words.
: )
 — fractalcore

hehe.
 — unknown

it's a bit too late, i know,
but happy anniversary,
The Tao Of Pooh.

: )
 — fractalcore

thanks for reading, unk.
care to elaborate on "weirdo"?

: )
 — fractalcore

I love that book, along with the sequel, and I also love this poem. Adorable, just like Pooh.
 — atomictorte

good for you, atomictorte.

haven't bought the book till now.
thanks so much for reading.

: )
 — fractalcore

Hopefully you got some on the camera, guys get arrested for those voyeur acts , must be a pea-eyed camera,  hope you washed his lens with a yellow filter... j.g. smiles.... just another take besides the teddy pooh the bear thing ...
 — goeszon

hi goeszon sir,

i got caught stealing the darn book, is all, hehehe.
stoopid stoopid me.

thanks so much for gracing this page.
; )
 — fractalcore

.
 — unknown

thanks for faving this, reid.

: )
 — fractalcore

benjamin hoff, huh?

haikus are fun to make...impossible to master, though...like the game othello...
they are suppose to be like the ending repeat of an echo in a vast place...with no more than a few lines, the best haiku bring the entire universe into the mind...


and i agree, using that title makes your poem look stupid...

top heavy...
personally, i wouldn't post a haiku i wrote unless it shuts me up, stops me in my tracks...
 — rlw2759

but...having read it a second time...i like it.
 — rlw2759

I'm still learning to read you better, fractalcore...but this sounds really medical....chuckle
 — PaleHorse

hmmmm..
 — psychofemale

rlw2759,

yes, it's quite hard to master especially when one tries to write
it in english -- it just can't be done like that as it is inherently a
japanese reaction to nature and its intricacies. wish i were a jap
but i like what i did with the 5-7-5 structure here.

glad you liked it on your 2nd read and thanks for your crit/comment.
: )
 — fractalcore

PaleHorse,

thank you, dude. i'm still trying to write me better
with medically precise incisions, hehe.

i miss chuckle_s, don't you?
: )
 — fractalcore

psychofemale,

...Om...

; )
 — fractalcore

Hey you,
Just for a second sit up sharp
I want to kill your token

Fact, Do you have any idea how hard it is to read your poems

I got tale of pooh.........look at me go..................
 — Quen

All the lovers that have come before ----ah pooh
 — Quen

pooh pooh pooh phoop phppoop poo op poo ha  piiiwuj[
poop......
 — unknown

hi, Quen.
do i know you fwom somewheh?

do you have any idea how hard it is
for me to poop sometimes?

hehe, thanks for dropping

bye.
; )
 — fractalcore

hi, unk.

i know.
once you pop it never stops, eh?

; )
 — fractalcore

Pringles.
so good to be English.
 — Quen

shingles --

it's so good to
live without it.

; )
 — fractalcore

like crabs but less
so?
 — Quen

no, more of an encounter
with a chicken and a fox.

it was a bloody mess sans
the blood.

; )
 — fractalcore

happy 3rd anniversary to this post.
; )
 — fractalcore

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