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TheNinety Syllables
OnA Tripod At Night
Footing the entirety
With eyes taking notice
Of the feat taking place...
Light maybe not in place
But the eyes could preface,
"We're millions on sentry."
So footing goes round and
Never misses a bend
And thus becomes the trend.
Confident tripod he –
Made wise by drinking the
Sis-six-sixth cup of tea.

written 11/25/07

thanks, gnormal.

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6 Dec 07

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 — raskolniikov

 — fractalcore

wow i jus rlly do not understand what people see in this shit
 — unknown

thanks again, raskolniikov.
and to you, too, unknown.
 — fractalcore

interesting words and ideas play, observable reality in disguise
 — nisetru

thanks, nisetru.
the reader can, of course,
view it from different angles.
what reality do you make of it?
 — fractalcore

and, oh, is there a way we can
write titles in two or more lines here?
 — fractalcore

i read it as a surreal poem about our reality. plus it is about someone special, even if Light maybe not in place.
i don't think the site allows two or more line titles...
 — nisetru

well it's supposed to be a 3-line title and
yes, you can call that person special.
: )
 — fractalcore

just revisiting the link.
: )
 — fractalcore

no:where we go again -- without a doubt about the light and the teasan -- here you show your roots of wordplay in words that tantalize the tongue into wonders to come --
 — AlchemiA

thanks for the visit, Alc.
: )
 — fractalcore

thought i just heard a screaming faggot.

just kidding. i love the gesture, unk.
: )
 — fractalcore

happy pc anniversary to you, too,
piece #2.

: )
 — fractalcore

i love your writing style.
Your poems are great.
 — faith

thanks, faith.

it's easy to be inspired when you
have these really good poets around.

: )
 — fractalcore

bumpeetee day, everee-one.
; )
 — fractalcore

almost 3 years...

i remember reading through your works
for 12 hours or so, dude.

; )
 — fractalcore

congrats you learned how to use an underline...NEXT!
 — unknown

it actually took me forever to figure that out.

; )
 — fractalcore