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typO negative

Can-on-drums, of this
Of that and whatnot...
I'd better now choke.
Just dig me a hole
Where I'll gladly stink;
Presents, pasths, fut-yours:
Can-naught pay the price
If you won't let me;
Hear the crow cant, "SHE..."

aka CAN'T SHE?

written 11/26/07

for Diana Jiganie

thanks, gnormal.

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13 Dec 07

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 — chuckle_s

wo. veree innovative. nice word creations. great humor.
 — listen

"cannot pay the..." is like where you get to the part where you really, really, want to write one of those lamer poems, but are too embarrassed?
 — joey

chuckle_s: 123 321 444 555 666

listen: thank you.

joey: thank you, too.
 — fractalcore

Ugh, looks like it was written in 30 seconds not to mention it doesn't rhyme. Let me know when actually take poetry seriously then I'll consider re-reading it.
 — MrTom

thank you for reading, MrTom (and everyone else).
i got a few more lame poems to post

till then,
 — fractalcore

i take it as a sort of telling god or life or destiny or the wind or no one at all that fuss and rules are useless and get you tired.
i think you want something rare :) to be able to live, the way you want
is it so?
 — nisetru

you are very keen, nisetru.
you hit one side of the coin
just right.

thanks for taking the time.
: )
 — fractalcore

I am O-neg.
I like your different kinda style, fract.
yes indeed,
you are interesting.
 — jenakajoffer

very kind of you, jen.
my selective memory tells me
i gotta have my finger pricked
again to really make sure i'm

pain is a beautiful thing.
: )
 — fractalcore

very whimsical...
 — JoelJosol

thanks for dropping by, Joel.
: )
 — fractalcore

How ignorant am I to not glance at your library of poems until now.
I love your style.
If I ever become a raging homosexual,
marry me.
 — EpicPants

slight revision of |8.

huh? i'm good, man.
but no thanks,
er thanks nonetheless.
: )
 — fractalcore

and there are other more lofty pieces in
the roster if you care to read them, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

just revisiting the link.
: )
 — fractalcore

Oh Negative while I`m Be Positive -- this gathers us to your stylistic word play and fractured mirrored gleanings inwordly meaning -- poke(d) is the power of now here no:where
 — AlchemiA

got that right, AlchemiA.
thanks for stopping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

I like how there is more to your poetry than the words.
 — technomancer

thank you so much, technomancer.
: )
 — fractalcore

 — chuckle_s

i be negative too, and maybe there's some blood-affinity to this poem i should be feeling but i must have had a complete transfusion into type baba-dabba-doo, cause i'm not feeling this as poem out of poetry. nice word-wrap though, like singing.
 — geckodrome

ey, chuckle_s.

ob-seen it once,
looked back twice,
shaded by the t[h]ree,
and went on fo[u]rever.

: )
 — fractalcore

ey, mike.

this is actually a fully-loaded piece
that i didn't mean to appear obvious --
or obscene as chuck may have noticed.
i was emotional when i wrote this and i
want it to stay cryptic and personal.

thanks for canting it.
: )
 — fractalcore

aww I love this one  "this and that"  I also use this. I love this and that....

how long did you write this?
 — unknown

hi again, ivana.

well, it took me along while
to write but if you meant
"when" i wrote it, it was
more than a year ago.

"this and that", yes.
: )
 — fractalcore

dedication's almost 3 years overdue.
you were there when i wrote this, nisetru.

; )
 — fractalcore