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trochee
| so i leased your scent as a muse awaiting the hopeful ink | 1 |
now | 2 |
at the nib of this dry pen, | 3 |
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if not words at least the opaque incisions would blur | 4 |
the duskiness of a writer's block. | 5 |
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15 Dec 07 |
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something like "radiance," instead of "scent"
— poetbill
beautiful poem, darling. Restrained and elegant. ( space bar between at least )
— banditfemme
aura maybe?
not sure i like the word leased.
hi trochee.
— unknown
lovely piece. simple and just right. - k
— pghpoet
i'd loose so at the beginning
and you need a space between at and least
— unknown
Blond is sweet. Love is apples.
Love is sweet. Blond is apples.
Apples are sweet. Love is blond.
I give up,
Art
— unknown
thanks bill, BF, unknown, PGHPOET and the unknowns again.
and yep i have to stick to "scent". something personal.
hey hi unknown. thnks for reading.
— trochee
i don't like L4,
shouldn't a poem that is about writer's block be...sort of crap and include silly metaphors about constipation? Rather than being this sweet and wonderfully penned...hmmm.
— DeformedLion
this is a beautiful way to personalize your muse
and the romantic inability to inspire-
whatever I mean, it's good
and I love "leased", oh I do love that here.
nice poem.
=-)
— jenakajoffer
Thnks jenjen :)
— trochee
Terrible thing that block but what is even worst are getting ideas that turn out thin and half cocked.
Larry dead imagining Lark
— larrylark
Thanks for reading Larry.
i guess every writer at some point goes through this unfortunate disorder.
— trochee
I'm with you on the use of the word "scent,"--I think it's the perfect word choice. Love the first stanza. Interesting and elegant piece.
— sybarite
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