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It's Just Me Singing
happymole

i'll give you my soul
 1
just take control
 2
even when the trees are tall
 3
i will never fall
 4
'coz you will catch me
 5
and you will even tell me
 6
 
 
that all my dreams are
 7
at my feet and available
 8
 
 
when you see me cry
 9
no, i won't deny
 10
even if the others lie
 11
i still won't deny
 12
though i seem so weak
 13
believe that i'm still at my peak
 14
 
 
you don't have to try
 15
my love you'll always find
 16
 
 
and if i try
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you say there won't be goodbye
 18
no matter how tired you are
 19
you'll still go that far
 20
just to carry me
 21
so i will feel free
 22
 
 
to do things i wanna do
 23
i wanna do them for you
 24
 
 
watch me fly so high above
 25
pull me and let me feel your love
 26
no thunder nor heavy rain
 27
can stop me from loving you
 28

19 Dec 07

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Comments:

Your title is misleading. I don't appreciate being lied to.
 — DeformedLion

thanks for the comment, DeformedLion.
it was just me singing to my bluesy riffs.
but hey, titles change.
 — happymole

nice sentiment, though as a poem it needs work. Lots of work. Lots and lots... you get the idea.
 — trixabelle

i think i really should have you
this Sing Out Loud (SOL=soul)
: )

this has lots of potential if you
work on it a bit more.
i like |7-|8.
 — fractalcore

SOL does not translate to 'soul' you ninkapoop.
 — DeformedLion

ok help me with this, DL.
what's the ASCII code for
the "O" with a hyphen over it?
merry christmas.
: )
 — fractalcore

oh go fractal your core you silly little chickadee.


And onto this 'poem'...well I can't really read it as a poem because it is more of a song...what with the forced rhyme and  all that stuff about love. overly setimentalised.
 — DeformedLion

look:  ō
i found it!
SōL=soul
agree?

yeah, it's a good song and
i love soul/jazz/blues.
can you suggest a revision?
 — fractalcore

Hmm...well unk, I guess I shouldn't have posted this stuff here.  This isn't really a poem.  I just posted this so I won't forget the lyrics of one of my blues.  :)  Sorry.
 — happymole

but i find this poetic and lyrical.

i apologize for forgetting to fave it.
: )
 — fractalcore

nice. i do agree, it has a lovely lyrical quality to it.
 — listen

Thanks a lot, fract and listen.  I think I'm confused now.  How do we really define poetry, or a poem perhaps?  Is there a universal rule regarding poetry...of what is and what isn't?
 — happymole

you'd better ask joey about that.
; )
 — fractalcore

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