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wax dolls
fractalcore

in the attic:
 1
lunatics
 2
you and me.
 3
 
 
i beg,
 4
you let go
 5
but only briefly
 6
 
 
so i can close the hatch...
 7




written 11/26/07


with and for nisetru.
thanks for the title.

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20 Dec 07

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thank you, unknown.
the redundancy you try to uphold
is quite doing its job.

sixes have that kind of  charm but
not the 3rd time they appear as a
digit.

or maybe i'm contradicting myself.
merry christmas.
: )
 — fractalcore

now don't drink the
six-six-sixth cup of my tea
here. shop's closed for
the holidays.

christmas a merry redundancy.
: )
 — fractalcore

my second favorite poem of yours after 'i love you' :)
 — nisetru

oh, you're very kind, nisetru.
thought it will gain another
one of those wretched sixes.

merry christmas.
 — fractalcore

wax dolls;
I think of voodoo.
 — jenakajoffer

voodoo dolls wallowing in voodoo soup?
hehe, could've been goo-goo dolls among
many other things.

thanks so much.
: )
 — fractalcore

10.
 — raskolniikov

thank you so much, rask.
: )
 — fractalcore

oooooooo. nice
 — themolly

thank you so much, themolly.
: )
 — fractalcore

witty. the ending is very catchy. you use the sparing technique really well.
 — listen

thanks so much, listen.
pleasure to have you here again.

oops, i see a 1 coming.
; )
 — fractalcore

nice poem
 — chuckle_s

thanks, chuckle_s.
welcome back.
: )
 — fractalcore

this was good
 — unknown

with a lot of help from her,
yes it was.

it still is.
; )
 — fractalcore

hey where's nisetru?
 — unknown

ey, she's around.

takes a peek every
once in awhile.

the title was her own idea.
; )
 — fractalcore

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