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The 28th of December
dmartin

maybe it was all one big metaphor,
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the book of secrets,
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things we really knew all along
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but never had any confirmation of.
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a splash of irony and foreshadow
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in a Jack and Coke that was more soda at the top,
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with the truth at the bottom of glass.
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we lost the time and found words,
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everything so surreal, something straight out of a movie.
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shades of high school, of innocence,
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like it was the first time being yourself in a long time.
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two a.m. came and then four,
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then it was quiet as the phones closed
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and that was the first time all night there was an awkward silence.
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I fell asleep thinking
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there are simple ways to define each night,
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as good or bad, fun or sad,
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but we reached back and found something more complex,
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subtle and sincere, we spoke
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like we were searching for a missing person
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that was sitting with us at the table the whole time.
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dinner and a tmc movie next friday night?

29 Dec 07

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fave 10.

happy new year.
: )
 — fractalcore

i like this very much - rhythmic with so much subtlety - december 28th is a special day for me - and that lured me in - the poem didn't disappoint.
 — opal

EH, very mediocre, but the audience on this site will love it for its lack of depth, teen-love-story-feel, and superficial tangibility.
 — unknown

just revisiting.
and, unk, i just turned 12, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

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