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fractalcore

Following suit in a black suit?
 1
Guess I'll just light the incense
 2
Cross-legged over the phantom
 3
Cushion of your decadence.
 4
 
 
Indeed –
 5
 
 
Why bridges are built or burnt: an
 6
Answer, no question at all;
 7
While a comfy quilt is now yours
 8
Cliché is cliché's low tall.
 9




lines written 12/17/07, 8/31/07 & now;
merged in response to Final Salvo @
http://poetrycritical.net/read/45080/

5 Jan 08

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yeah, so what?

s
the professional
 — unknown

interesting rendering of the opposition action - inaction, and then exemplification of cliche thinking.
not bad in relation to the title
 — nisetru

I don't fully get it but it has some memorable lines that I like very much.
 — cowork

Uh oh... am not trying to take everyone as one but oftentimes, those whose lives have been dictated by pressures were not able to realize their importance.

Are you trying to awaken those who have been wasting their lives in a pile of shit? :)  

Well, maybe not.  I guess I just misunderstood your poem.  :)
 — happymole

s, the professional: would love to read your poetry, dear sir. thanks for stopping by.
: )

nisetru: thank you so much for sticking around and for the poetry.
: )

cowork: thank you so much for reading and your kindness.
: )

happymole: inspiration is scarce these days and i think the dead poets' society excludes the living. it takes a great deal of good character not to be engulfed by and become one with the mediocre. most - if not all - of them come back though, them good guys...the good times. but seeing them leave with their poetry is just unbearable.
: )
 — fractalcore

i miss this piece...
i miss the peace...
: )
 — fractalcore

Really liked phantom Cushion of your decadence. Not sure about these two stanza's together, seems to me they belong apart.

Larry
 — larrylark

sorry for the delayed response, larry dear sir lark.

you're right about them belonging apartly, hehe.
i provided a link to show that there was only the first
strophe originally and then i devised that "Indeed --"
bridge for the conglomerate that follows.

excerpts they are.

thank you so much for gracing this piece.
: )
 — fractalcore

is that a question?
: )
 — fractalcore

i know you probably prefer not to be praised for your humor, but once again you do that here. perfectly balanced humor with a strong point to drive it home.

nice.
 — listen

thank you so much, listen.
: )
 — fractalcore

if I had read just the first stanza of the following poem, I would have never learned to appreciate a wonderful poet.
 — unknown

Excerpts for the Experts
fractalcore

Following...
 — unknown

unknowns, thank you so much for the appreciation.
: )
 — fractalcore

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