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(my pet's) Hobby?
happymole

by happymole:
 1
 
 
Rags, mats, and husks --
 2
all are but targets of one.
 3
 
 
Sharp, long, and white
 4
gnaws them like gum.
 5
 
 
A hobby or an attitude?
 6
Let my pet decide.
 7
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
by fractalcore:
 8
 
 
your pet's got attitude
 9
 
 
a dog?
 10
maybe a frog?
 11
 
 
is it a cat?
 12
 
 
a dudette or a dude?
 13
hmm...i wonder really what.
 14

7 Jan 08

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you have a very playful pet there.
: )
 — fractalcore

a cat? a dog?
maybe a frog?
: )
 — fractalcore

Keep guessing, fractalcore!  Someday you'll know...  :)
 — happymole

Is it gollum?

I like this. Simple and cute. And it doesn't pee on me which is nice.
 — DeformedLion

hehe..."my precious".  Thanks, DL!  :)
 — happymole

your pet's got attitude.
: )
 — fractalcore

is it a cat?
: )
 — fractalcore

a dudette or a dude?
hmm...i wonder really what.
: )
 — fractalcore

It's a black _________, Fractalcore!  Haha...  
 — happymole

a found poem!
look:

your pet's got attitude

a dog?
maybe a frog?

is it a cat?

a dudette or a dude?
hmm...i wonder really what.

: )
 — fractalcore

nice pet detective poem here,
it's cute.

line 2 kind of gnaws at me and i don't know if it's a hobby or an attitude, but could you say "are all but targets", instead of "all are"?

i loved DL's comment there, haha, priceless.
=-)
 — jenakajoffer

Nice point there, jen.  But instead of rearranging those 2 words, I decided to place a hyphen to make it sound/look better and unannoying.  :)
 — happymole

yeah, it is better without the swap,
the hyphen works very well.
=-)
 — jenakajoffer

Thanks jen.  :)
 — happymole

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